Talk:One of Us Is Lying (TV series)/GA1
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Nominator: Pamzeis (talk · contribs) 04:28, 23 March 2024 (UTC)
Reviewer: Riley1012 (talk · contribs) 13:18, 7 June 2024 (UTC)
Hi, I will take this on. I will complete an initial review within one week. -Riley1012 (talk) 13:18, 7 June 2024 (UTC)
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1. Well-written
- Nate notices that Bronwyn has stolen Simon's laptop and when he confronts her about it Bronwyn later puts it in the trunk of her car. Add commas after "laptop" and "about it"
- Done
- ...the four students are introduced to Officer Miller, who has initiated an investigation on Simon's death... change to "an investigation into"
- Done
- There, Jake steals Simon's Xbox and Addy tells the rest of the group... Add a comma after "Xbox"
- Done
- Together, the four students decide to make Janae a suspect but fail to do. Should be "to do so" at the end
- Done
- At night, Bronwyn and Nate destroy Simon's laptop and Maeve sends a hard drive to the police department. Add a comma after "laptop"
- Done
- Jakes pulls out a gun and chases her into the woods. Should be "Jake"
- Done
- Addy then admits she pulled the trigger that killed Jake and offers to turn herself in, but the rest of the group agree that it is too late. Change to "agrees"
- Done
- After the group retrieve the watch, Simon Says tells one of them to wear it. Change to "retrieves"
- Done
- Simon Says's demands become personal as each of Murder Club receive different orders... Change to "each Murder Club member receives"
- Done
- She then asks Nate for help with a delivery Add a period
- Done
- The group decide to find evidence that Fiona killed Giselle instead of handing Addy over. Change to "decides"
- Done
- Maeve mentions that the gun lacks Fiona's fingerprints and she has a video of the five in the woods... Add a comma after "fingerprints"
- Done
- Due to a a COVID-19 lockdown,... Remove one of the "a"s
- Done
2. Verifiable
CopVio check is fine- the highlights are properly attributed quotes. The premise section and episode descriptions do not need citations per WP:PLOTCITE. The article uses reliable sources and has a proper reference layout.
Spot check:
- No issues: 4, 6, 9, 12, 16, 23, 25, 29, 34
- McManus stated that her main objective was to keep her characters' emotional cores intact I would add quotations around "emotional cores" because it's quite specific phrasing
- Done
- In joining the series, van Grootel, Cochrane, and Uche all said they had not heard about the novel before they auditioned. I don't see in sources 19 and 20 where this information was found
- I believe it's in the videos above the text, but I've removed this as it's relevance is questionable
- Okay, sounds good.
- McManus stated that her main objective was to keep her characters' emotional cores intact I would add quotations around "emotional cores" because it's quite specific phrasing
- Citation for the cast section?
- As per MOS:TVPLOT,
Plot summaries, and other aspects of a program's content, such as its credits, may be sourced from the works themselves, as long as only basic descriptions are given.
- As per MOS:TVPLOT,
- Ah okay, thanks for the heads up.
3. Broad
- Could you expand the premise section further?
- Done
- On January 20, 2023, Peacock canceled the series after two seasons. I would move this either to the end of the production section or create a section just for the cancelation (if there's more relevant info besides just the fact it was canceled).
- Done
4. Neutral and 5. Stable
The article is neutral and does not have any content disputes.
6.Illustrated
The poster has non-free use rationale. The photo of Jennifer Morrison is free and has a relevant caption
@Pamzeis: I've completed the review! My suggestions are listed in the bullet points. Let me know if you have any questions. -Riley1012 (talk) 19:37, 8 June 2024 (UTC)
- @Riley1012: Responded to your comments. Pamzeis (talk) 11:52, 9 June 2024 (UTC)
- @Pamzeis: Thanks for doing this so quickly! Everything looks good now. -Riley1012 (talk) 12:42, 9 June 2024 (UTC)