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Reviewer: AJona1992 (talk · contribs) 02:25, 27 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from AJona1992
  • Is "following the under-performance" - really necessary? Also "first single" isn't that a lead single?
  • Too many sentences have the word "the song" - needs a variety
  • "charted" is not necessary, just start it off with "It peaked at number ..."
  • It also charted in Belgium and Switzerland. - and what were those peaks?
  • An accompanying music video ---> The single's accompanying music video ...
  • "portrays Houston and her girlfriends taking time out and spending time at spa and a club" - is missing two words
  • "the mini-concert" - sounds orish
  • "In an interview with entertainment website" - no need for "entertainment website"
  • "album: "One of Those Days" and "Dear John Letter"" - there's no need for a semi-colon. Try this Shek'speare and Reynolds penned three songs that day, two of which are featured on the album, "One of Those Days" and "Dear John Letter".
  • A 4-track CD single was released on the next day - (1) The way you start off this sentence weakens the prose (2) A CD single does not include 4 tracks, this sounds more like a maxi single if anything.
  • "an exclusive" - is orish
  • Houston begins the song by declaring her stress: "This is just for me [...] Got to take time out [...] You don't know what I'm going through." - is just a mess. Look at Amor Prohibido (song) for a better way of representing the lyrics.
  • "The German newspaper," is not necessary at all.
  • "the issue dated November 16, 2002" - remove
  • "the issue dated November 9, 2002" - remove
  • "the week dated January 4, 2003" - remove
  • Billboard charts are 13 days in advance. That's why we use issue dated and week ending. 15:47, 27 December 2011 (UTC)
  • "Houston performed the song as the opening number of the concert to a crowd of about 4000 people" - where's the comma for 4000?
  • "on December 10, 2002" - redundant, since you gave the date in the first sentence.
Reference checking
Billboard was acquired by Prometheus Global Media in 2009. I was told by some experienced editors that the publisher for all BB links, before 2009 should be Nielsen Business Media and after 2009 Prometheus. That's why they look different. Novice7 (talk) 06:43, 1 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Comment from another editor
  • Nowhere in the WP:WIAGA does it say references must be consistent.

From Wikipedia:What the Good article criteria are not:

  • "Importantly, the GA criteria are a standard, not the opinion of individual reviewers."
  • (2) Factually accurate and verifiable
  • Mistakes to avoid (excerpted):
  • Requiring the use (or non-use) of citation templates.
  • Requiring consistently formatted, complete bibliographic citations. (If you are able to figure out what the source is, that's a good enough citation for GA.)

MathewTownsend (talk) 22:11, 28 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

It's common sense. A "good article" does not need to have inconsistency, look at a few other experienced GAN reviewers and check out their reviews. Best, Jonayo! Selena 4 ever 15:35, 2 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Novice7 is right. Whatever he has done is 100% right and I bet on it. Billboard was acquired by Prometheus Global Media only in 2009. Jivesh1205 (Talk) 15:39, 2 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
And reference 4 is from Google Book, that is the physical copy ofBillboard. Jivesh1205 (Talk) 15:42, 2 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
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