Talk:One Time (Justin Bieber song)/GA2

GA Review

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Reviewer: S Masters (talk) 17:41, 10 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for criteria)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS):
Article is well written and complies with WP:MoS.
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
References appear to comply with WP:RS and main statements are properly referenced.
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
Article appears to be stable.
It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Images are properly tagged and captioned.
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

Comments: There are numerous copy edit and MoS compliance issues with this article.

The lead must not mention anything that is not already contained in the sections - see WP:LEAD - for example, "Canadian".
It later released via digital download in the United States and Canada on July 7, 2009, and was released in several other countries during fall 2009. - "It was released..."
The accompanying music video features Bieber at a party, and features Usher and Bieber's friend, Ryan Butler. - This sentence should be recast to eliminate the double "features".
The second and third paragraphs in the section on composition should be rewritten to be in the past tense.
There is overlinking. Wikilinks should only appear on the first mention, and just once.
Bill Lamb of About.com stated that called the song a... - Grammar problems here.
The song quietly entered at number ninety-five... - MoS compliance. Numbers greater than nine are written numerically. This needs to be fixed throughout, including "top twenty", "top ten", "one hundred millon", etc.
The song first debuted on ~~the~~ Billboard...
It has since peaked at number fourteen. It peaked... - Rewrite to avoid duplication of "peaked".
It debuted in Belgium (Flanders) at twenty-six and peaked at twelve on the bubbling under chart, equaling the song to peak at sixty-two. - What does "equaling the song" mean?
It debuted in Belgium (Wallonia) tip chart... - debuted [on the]?
The charting of the song in Europe which propelled it to chart at twenty nine on the European Hot 100 chart. - Doesn't really make sense, plus rewrite to avoid triple use of "chart".
The music video, directed by Vashtie Kola.[29], was posted - Punctuation errors. Remove the period and shift the comma immediately after Kola.
Internationally, he appeared on the European program The Dome... - The Dome needs to be in italics.
The section on live performances should employ the use of semi-colons to separate the performances.
On November 23, 2009, on the London date of the tour,...
Originally an acoustic version... - Comma after originally.

I will allow up to seven days for all these issues to be resolved. You can contact me if you have any questions or problems.

On hold review

"It debuted in Belgium (Flanders) at twenty-six and peaked at twelve on the bubbling under chart, equaling the song to peak at sixty-two." - I am still not clear what "equaling the song" means? Does it mean that this is equivalent to the song peaking at sixty-two?
There are several instances where reference are placed before a period. They should be outside. And there is at least one instance where it is placed after a period, but is then followed by another period. ...making the song debut at forty-five on the Irish Singles Chart.[23]. - These need to be fixed.

Otherwise, I am happy with all the improvements made so far. I will allow more time for these final issues to be fixed, before a final review. -- S Masters (talk) 04:38, 12 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Fixed. Candyo32 (talk) 22:56, 12 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

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Unfortunately, the referencing issues have not been fixed. Following are just two that I found. There may be others. Please check each and every reference number to ensure that they have been fixed.

"...the song made a thirty spot jump from forty-seven to number seventeen, reaching a new peak on the chart[15]."
"The song has also achieved international success. It debuted in Belgium (Flanders) at twenty-six and peaked at twelve on the bubbling under chart, equivalent to peaking at sixty-two on the main chart. [19]."

"...equivalent to peaking at sixty-two on the main chart." - I could not find 62 in the reference. How did you come to this conclusion from the reference provided?

Once again, thanks for all your hard work in making this a better article. -- S Masters (talk) 04:28, 13 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Im confused at the problem for #1. The source says "Also making big moves on the list due to digital sales is Justin Bieber who sees two songs make identical 30-position jumps: "One Time" (47-17) and "One Less Lonely Girl" (60-30). The former track establishes a new peak position with its climb, surpassing a No. 20 rank achieved in November." For #2 "Tip" indicated it was on the Ultratip, like the U.S. Bubbling charts, and concluded by adding the remaining numbers for the equivalent chart position. Candyo32 (talk) 02:41, 17 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Think everything's fixed now! Candyo32 (talk) 03:01, 17 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

The problems with #1 and #2 have nothing to do with the references themselves. The problem is how the references are presented, i.e. [15]." which should be ."[15] and chart. [19]." which should be ."[19] - I could have done these for you but I want you to see where the problems are so that you can understand. -- S Masters (talk) 02:48, 17 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Final comments: After all the work done, I am now satisfied that it meets all the requirements for a Good Article, and I am happy to pass it as such. Good work! -- S Masters (talk) 04:46, 17 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]