Talk:One Child (Mariah Carey song)/GA1
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Reviewer: Magiciandude (talk · contribs) 00:45, 28 August 2015 (UTC)
I'll take on this review as I enjoy Mariah Caray. Erick (talk) 00:45, 28 August 2015 (UTC)
- Thank you :) — Calvin999 07:56, 28 August 2015 (UTC)
The article is really good looking, there are only a couple of things I'd fix before I pass this.
- Is the period after 2010 on the infobox when it was recorded necessary?
- Guess not. Removed. — Calvin999 17:39, 28 August 2015 (UTC)
- "Assisted by Kenta Yonesaka, Alex Gulper, Peter Stanislaus, Charlie Paakkari, Tim Lauber, Tom Steel, Greg Dennon and Denis St. Amand, the children who participated in the chorus were Mariah Britt, Joshua Britt, Evyn Johnson, Makiah Johnson, Mason Johnson, Delaney Meyer, Elsie Moon and Cayla Nisperos." This sentence is too long. I'd suggest maybe listing the children who participated in the recording first and then Cooke's assistance in another sentence.
- "The children's choir voices span G3 to F♯5" I think this could be merged with the sentence mentioning the children who participated.
- "In the United States, the track peaked at number 12 on the Gospel Digital Chart" Even if it may seem obvious, I'd suggest mentioning the chart is from Billboard. Same thing on the chart table
- I noticed that the prose has "children's chorus" but the credits and personnel says "Children's Chorus". Are they a name of specific chorus? If not, then "chorus" should be lowercased as well.
- No. I've removed the capital. — Calvin999 17:39, 28 August 2015 (UTC)
That's all I really got. The lead's length is fine and the prose is backed up by reliable sources. Just fix the above issues and I'll be happy to pass this. Erick (talk) 17:32, 28 August 2015 (UTC)
- Done all. Thank you very much. — Calvin999 17:39, 28 August 2015 (UTC)
- No problem. Great job with the article! Erick (talk) 18:10, 28 August 2015 (UTC)