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Good articleOn the Low has been listed as one of the Music good articles under the good article criteria. If you can improve it further, please do so. If it no longer meets these criteria, you can reassess it.
Article milestones
DateProcessResult
April 8, 2022Good article nomineeListed

GA Review

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This review is transcluded from Talk:On the Low/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 07:31, 5 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]


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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()
3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()
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This article is nearly two months old, making a review wholeheartedly due! --K. Peake 07:31, 5 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox and lead

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  • Replace hlist with bullet points per Template:Infobox song
  • List as Elof Loelv under producer(s) since this is not a track listing
  • "who produced the track." → "who handled the production." and this should be the second sentence of the lead instead
  • Add a sentence inbetween credits and release here mentioning that the song was one of the first written for the album and when the singer previewed it
  • ""On the Low" is a downtempo" → "it is a downtempo"
  • Pipe minimal to Minimal music
  • "the single appeared below" → "the song appeared below"
  • "chart at number twelve on" → "chart, reaching number 12 on" per MOS:NUM
  • Wikilink lyric video to itself per MOS:LINK2SECT
  • "on Nyhetsmorgon and a session" → "on Nyhetsmorgon in 2018 and a 2020 session"
  • Pipe acoustic to Acoustic music
Done. Let me know if the added sentence works or not. Pancake (talk) 15:23, 6 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]
That is a proper addition to the lead, though I copyedited the preview part to avoid overusage of it. --K. Peake 06:43, 8 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Background

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  • Remove comma after third studio album
  • "for the album,[2] and" → "for the album and" moving [2] solely to the end of the sentence
  • The two tracks being the only ones written by her and Loelv is not sourced
  • "said that the two spent long days" → "said that the two spent heavy time" per the source
  • Pipe minimal to Minimal music
  • "out of all tracks" → "out of all the tracks"
  • Pipe chorus to Refrain
  • "when it came to melody." → "in terms of melody."
  • "she labelled it" → "she labelled the track"
Done. Pancake (talk) 15:23, 6 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Composition and lyrics

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  • Wikilink falsetto on the audio sample text
  • "minimal and detailed production backed" → "minimal and detailed production, backed" on the audio sample, with the pipe
  • Pipe bird calls to Bird vocalization
  • Pipe drums to Drum kit
  • Remove comma after percussion
  • Remove speech marks for minimalistic since this is an encyclopedic term
  • "and NME writer Hannah Mylrea characterized" → "whereas NME writer Hannah Mylrea characterized
  • "in lines such as" → "in lines such as,"
  • "the closing bird calls "transform Styrke's" → "the closing bird calls transform "Styrke's" per the source's wording
Done. Pancake (talk) 15:23, 6 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Release and promotion

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  • The skateboard being over a yellow background is not sourced
  • Wikilink lyric video to itself per MOS:LINK2SECT
  • The source mentions her performing the song in a small room and no bottom part is sourced for the lyrics
  • "Lisa Hultengren directed the video with" → "Lisa Hultengren directed the video, with"
  • Pipe acoustic to Acoustic music
  • "She learnt how to" → "Styrke learnt how to"
Done. Pancake (talk) 15:23, 6 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Reception

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  • "gave it a "Song of the Day" designation while writing," → "gave the track a "Song of the Day" designation, writing,"
  • Mention how Mylrea highlighted the vocals in the NME review
  • Start a new sentence at the Simon Österhof review because the NME one will be long enough on its own once expanded
  • "found it "irresistible"" → "found the song "irresistible""
  • "whispering working well" → "whispering work[s] well" in this context, as otherwise it does not read correctly
  • "He wrote, "The careful" → "He wrote that "the careful"
  • "more to discover."" → "more to discover"." per MOS:QUOTE (this is not a full sentence as the source shows)
  • "the song suffered from" → "the song suffers from"
  • "below the top 100 at number twelve on" → "at number 12 on" per MOS:NUM (previous part removal because it has already been stated)
Done. Pancake (talk) 15:23, 6 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Credits and personnel

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  • Use {{spaced ndash}} so there is the right space between credits and personnel.
Done. Pancake (talk) 15:23, 6 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]
  • Are you sure programming is listed before synthesizer under credits; I can't check since I don't have an account?
Changed up the order. Pancake (talk) 15:23, 6 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Charts

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  • Good

References

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  • Copyvio score looks great at 24.8%!!!!
  • Make sure all of these are archived by using the tool
I'm fairly inactive on Wiki these days. What tool is this? Pancake (talk) 15:23, 6 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]
  • Add the language parameter to refs 11 and 16
  • Cite BroadwayWorld as publisher instead on ref 29
Done! Pancake (talk) 15:23, 6 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]
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  • Good

Final comments and verdict

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Thanks for a thorough review, Kyle! Pancake (talk) 15:23, 6 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]
 Pass now, very good job and I would have checked through this sooner if you'd have given me a ping! --K. Peake 06:43, 8 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]