Talk:Omayra Sánchez/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: — ZjarriRrethues — ^talk 19:35, 22 April 2011 (UTC)

• Per WP:WORDS the following should be changed:

1. Her tragic death highlighted.
2. During three nights of agony, Omayra seemed strong but was suffering, which also isn't supported by the BBC source.
3. her eventual death came to epitomize the tragic nature of the Armero disaster

• The lead section should be separated in three equally sized paragraphs.
• There are no content disputes/edit wars and all views are presented equally so the article passes the neutrality and stability criteria--— ZjarriRrethues — ^talk 16:58, 23 April 2011 (UTC)

Should all be fixed. ceranthor 19:28, 23 April 2011 (UTC)

Source 15 is in a bare url form and it'd be better to replace it with a citation format. The actual quotes from the sources could be reduced and replaced with descriptive sentences like in the case of Her "courage and dignity" touched Frank Fournier and many other relief workers who gathered around her to pray and be with her. If a source can't be found to verify During three nights of agony, Omayra seemed strong but was suffering I'd remove it to avoid source misrepresentation. I'm also checking tha main photo's fair use criteria. These are probably my final comments before I list the article as GA.--— ZjarriRrethues — ^talk 19:46, 23 April 2011 (UTC)

Better? ceranthor 20:42, 23 April 2011 (UTC)

The photo can be used and the remaining issue is the title of the Plight section, which per WP:WORDS should be changed to something like Death.--— ZjarriRrethues — ^talk 19:24, 24 April 2011 (UTC)

fixed. ceranthor 21:18, 24 April 2011 (UTC)

I'll pass it then.--— ZjarriRrethues — ^talk 18:15, 25 April 2011 (UTC)