Talk:Oliver Bjorkstrand/GA1
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Reviewer: GhostRiver (talk · contribs) 18:53, 23 October 2021 (UTC)
I'll take a look at this! — GhostRiver 18:53, 23 October 2021 (UTC)
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Infobox and lede
[edit]- Might be worth including the IPA pronunciation of his surname (pronunciation guide can be found here
- Delink "Danish" per MOS:OVERLINK Done
Early life
[edit]- Comma after "in Herning, Denmark" per MOS:GEOCOMMA Done
Playing career
[edit]- First three paragraphs should be under a level 3 subhead called "Junior" Done
- Link the first instances of "goals", "assists", and "points" Done
- Remove "2012" in "By December 2012", as we know it should be sometime around there based on the prior sentence and the Top Prospects Game Done
- Link first instance of hat trick Done
- Period after "with Seth Jones" creates a sentence fragment after Done
- Link entry-level contract Done
- Hat trick is sometimes hyphenated, sometimes not Done
- "50-goal seasons since Dennis Holland in the 1987-88 and 1988-89." → "50-goal season since Dennis Holland from 1987-89" for close para/WP:LIMITED Done
- " a unanimous selection to the WHL's Western Conference First All-Star Team and was voted by his teammates as the Winterhawks’ Most Valuable Player." → "unanimously selected to the WHL's Western Conference First All-Star Team, while his teammates voted him the Winterhawks' Most Valuable Player." (active voice, fix close para) Done
Professional
[edit]- "Blue Jackets American" → "Blue Jackets' American" Done
- Link Lake Erie Monsters Done
- Link 2016 Calder Cup playoffs in the first paragraph ("first Calder Cup playoff appearance") and delink in the second ("Calder Cup Finals") Done
- Comma after "won the Calder Cup for the Monsters" Done
- "of making the Blue Jackets' 2016-17 opening night roster" Done
- Spaces around the ellipses in the Kekalainen quote, per MOS:ELLIPSIS Done
- Link AHL All-Star Classic Done
- Link trading deadline Done
- Comma after "player Roman Polak" Done
- Comma after "teammate Artemi Panarin" Done
- Hyphen to en dash for "2018-19 season" and link appropriately Done
- ""a guy that you can count on in every situation."" → ""a guy that you can count on in every situation"." per MOS:LQ Done
- The sentence about his three career playoff game-winning goals needs some explanation; we jump from CBJ making the playoffs to that, and I'm not sure what team these GWGs are against
- Link alternate captain Done
International play
[edit]- The link to the Denmark junior team should be in the second sentence, not the third Done
- Mention that he also made a senior appearance in 2015 Done
Awards and honours
[edit]- Reference needed here for Calder Cup MVP Done
References
[edit]- [2] (Rob Mixer) is missing "National Hockey League" in the publisher parameter Done
- [4] (Columbus Alive), [33] (Columbus Dispatch), and [45] (Toronto Star) should be the work param, not publisher Done
- Per MOS:ALLCAPS, [7] (Central Scouting), [15] (WHL championship series), [43] (Denmark sweeps), and [47] (Olympic dreams) should be in title case, not all caps Done
- [39] is different from the rest of the NHL press releases -- it has CBJ as the work and no publisher Done
General comments
[edit]- Photos are properly licensed and relevant
- No stability concerns in the revision history
- Earwig freaked out a little about the stats. Some WP:LIMITED areas noted above
That's what I've got! Putting on hold for now, feel free to ping me with Q's. — GhostRiver 19:26, 23 October 2021 (UTC)
- GhostRiver, so sorry to add to your workload but I seem to have missed the 2020–21 season because of the confusing dates. I am currently expanding it and it will need a review. HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 19:00, 28 October 2021 (UTC)
- Made a couple of small aesthetic changes on my own, and now I think it looks ready to pass! — GhostRiver 17:50, 6 November 2021 (UTC)