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Reviewer: Hog Farm (talk · contribs) 20:50, 10 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Criteria

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1. Prose ✓ Pass

2. Verifiability ✓ Pass

3. Depth of Coverage ✓ Pass

4. Neutral ✓ Pass

5. Stable ✓ Pass

6. Illustrations ✓ Pass

7. Miscellaneous ✓ Pass

Comments

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  • It's fine to use alternating current and AC, but you just need to put (AC) after the first mention of alternating current, to make it clear the abbreviation means the same thing.
 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 20:21, 11 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • Link flagship
 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 20:21, 11 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Shallenberger ran the experiments of alternating current apparatus which had been imported from Europe." - This doesn't quite read right, can you rephrase this?
 Done - rewrote accordingly. --Doug Coldwell (talk) 21:27, 11 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • "resign from the Westinghouse company but he continued" - Should company be capitalized?
 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 20:27, 11 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • George Westinghouse is a duplink
 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 20:27, 11 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • "One thing led to another and eventually a few weeks later he built the first alternating current measuring meter." - Not quite encyclopedic tone here
 Done - reworded accordingly. --Doug Coldwell (talk) 21:39, 11 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • "In 1888 Elihu Thomson patented a walking-beam meter," - Comma after 1888
 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 20:29, 11 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • Is there a way you can combine the Later life and death and Personal life sections? Those are both super short sections.
 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 20:29, 11 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

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  • Ref 12 is dead
 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 21:46, 11 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • Look on WorldCat for the OCLC numbers for the pre-ISBN sources. For instance, here's the link for Jordan 1914 [1]. The OCLC is in the details section
 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:25, 12 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

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  • Is cause of death known?
 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 13:33, 12 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

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  • I don't think the hatnote is necessary. The first and middle name of a person being the same as the first and last name of another isn't really a confusion point. For instance, there's no hatnote to George Washington at George Washington Carver.
 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 20:32, 11 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • Consider adding an infobox person. This isn't a GA requirement, but it would be nice.
 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 20:32, 11 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Placing on hold. Hog Farm (talk) 16:43, 11 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

@Hog Farm: All issues have been addressed. Can you take another look now. Thanks.--Doug Coldwell (talk) 13:33, 12 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Passing. Hog Farm (talk) 14:59, 12 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
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