Talk:Oliver's Battery, Tresco/GA1

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Reviewer: Sturmvogel 66 (talk · contribs) 22:51, 4 June 2014 (UTC)[reply]

I'll get to this shortly.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 22:51, 4 June 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Comments. I copyedited the article per my copyediting disclaimer. These are my edits. - Dank (push to talk) 11:33, 7 June 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks Dank! Hchc2009 (talk) 12:03, 7 June 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Sure thing. - Dank (push to talk) 13:16, 7 June 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Comments. I personally don't think this article is long enough, at 10,000 bytes. It's only nine paragraphs long. Thats being said, the article is well written, and appears to meet most of the GA criteria.

However, this right here bugs me: It is triangular in shape, measuring roughly 25 metres by 30 metres by 30 metres-I understand that you are trying to convey the idea that one wall of this triangular fort is 25 metres, while the other two walls are 30 metres in legnth. But the way you phrase this makes it seem that fort is 25*30*30=22,500 cubic metres, or 25 m long*30 m wide*30 m tall. This definetely needs to be rephrased.

You've done a good job otherwise with the article. Good luck with getting to GA status! Feitlebaum (talk) 23:25, 8 June 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Evening! Feitlebaum, length isn't one of the GA article criteria; I think this article summarises the literature on this fortification pretty thoroughly, unless I've missed an article or book somewhere.

Would "whose sides measure roughly..." make the dimensions clearer? Hchc2009 (talk) 18:52, 10 June 2014 (UTC)[reply]

That's a good point. It isn't one of the criteria. It is just my personal opinion. And yes, I think that phrasing would work. Have a nice day. Feitlebaum (talk) 21:04, 10 June 2014 (UTC)[reply]

No DABs and external links are good.
Is it possible to label the islands on the map? Tresco is pretty obvious, but St. Mary's is a little ambiguous.
Images are appropriately licensed.
How far apart are the islands?
While your prose is more than good enough, your suggested change in response to Feitlebaum's point is clearer than the existing prose.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 21:28, 10 June 2014 (UTC)[reply]

With apologies for the delay...! I've put in a distance for the islands, based on the OS map. Prose has been changed. I'm not sure, though, how to edit location maps (I can do the graphics easily enough, but I'm not sure how they include the lat/long information that the red dot is mapped against). Hchc2009 (talk) 16:20, 23 June 2014 (UTC)[reply]