Talk:Old Man Willow/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: LunaEatsTuna (talk · contribs) 17:15, 16 February 2023 (UTC)

LunaEatsTuna: Many thanks for the review. I've responded to all the comments. Chiswick Chap (talk) 19:18, 16 February 2023 (UTC)

I always appreciate the hasty response! Per your changes implemented I am now happy to pass yet another great Tolkien article for GA status. Congrats! ツLunaEatsTuna (💬)— 20:11, 16 February 2023 (UTC)

Copyvio check

Earwig says good to go. Quotations are used in-line with WP:COPYQUOTE.

• Noted.

Files

All images used are appropriate, relevant, of good quality and copyright-free:

File:Old Man Willow.jpg: valid non-free use rationale;

File:Sketch Map of The Shire.svg: CC-BY-SA 4.0;

File:Willow view - Flickr - Orchids love rainwater.jpg: CC-BY-SA 2.0;

File:Temptation Adam Eva.jpg: valid public domain rationale (via CC0 1.0 dedication);

File:Scene from Virgil's Aeneid; the Cumaean Sibyl leads Aeneas t Wellcome V0042049.jpg: CC-BY-SA 4.0;

File:Khraniteli Old Man Willow.jpg: valid non-free use rationale.

• Noted.

Prose

• I would wikilink the first mentions of Oxford in the lead and body for the benefit of non-British readers.
  • Done.

• I am slightly unsure about § Context. The article has a lot of article sections with only a few sentences. Would it look strange if it were merged into § Narrative somewhere? Perhaps Old Man Willow's appearance in The Adventures of Tom Bombadil could be merged to its already existing mention in § Interpretations.
  • It's purely Tolkien context, not interpretation, and I've kept it as brief as possible.
    • Fair enough, perhaps I am too familiar with Tolkien at this point!

• Does the image of the sketch map have to be so large?
  • For many plausible settings of how users view thumbnail images, yes, or the text labels will be sub-pixel in size.
    • Noted.

• "As Tolkien explains in the narrative of The Lord of the Rings" – would wikilinking narrative to Narrative structure of The Lord of the Rings be a stretch?
  • Probably, this isn't about the structure.
    • Agreed.

• May be personal taste, but should § Narrative be written in past tense? I am not sure if you wrote this one, but all of your other nominated Middle-earth GAs are written in present tense. I am not familiar with our literature nor fiction policies; are both tenses acceptable? (If so, than ignore this rant!)
  • Present it is.

• "who 'sang' to the" – what do the apostrophes indicate?
  • Removed.

• "Once safely in Tom Bombadil's house, Bombadil explained" – change to "Once safely in Bombadil's house, he explained"
  • Fixed.

• "They write that trees (like other creatures) are in Tolkien's world subject to the corruption" – recommend "They write that trees (like other creatures in Tolkien's world) are subject to the corruption" for better flow IMO.
  • Done.

• The sentence starting "They state that while Tolkien's writings" is really long and jaded, especially with several different punctuation marks. I would split "and that Tolkien succeeds" into its own sentence.
  • Done.

• "in Genesis, the Cross, the tree of death in the Gospels" – cross does not have to be capitalised.
  • Fixed.

• "Revelation (22:2)" – none of the other books are wikilinked nor do they have verses.
  • Linked Book of Genesis. This verse is both much less familiar than the Genesis story, and significant for mentioning a tree.
    • Oh, I see! That does make sense.

• "Old Man Willow, along with the Old Forest and Tom Bombadil, was not included" – recommend "Old Man Willow, along with the Old Forest and Tom Bombadil, are not included"
  • Reworded.

• Is there a more reliable source for Old Man Willow in Khraniteli?
  • It's just the TV play itself. I can't find anything better on this small point.
    • Sad how Old Man Willow is forgotten by the media ):

Refs

Passes spotcheck—no concerns with any of the Primary citations nor refs 1, 3, 4 or 7. No formatting issues either. Nice work!

• Noted.

Other

Short desc, Notes, nav, other templates and cats all good.

• Noted.

• Just needs WP:ALT text.
  • Added.
    • Thank you!

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.