Talk:Oh! How I Hate to Get Up in the Morning/GA1
GA Review
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Overall, the article is well written. It does a good job of describing the song and its history. There are a few things I noted as I read the article:
- The lead should summarize the whole article, so it should mention that the song was part of Ziegfeld follies of 1918 and This is the Army.
- "Although his voice was thin, his timing was perfect and he presented a hilarious stage persona" is point of view. I would recommend, "According to the reviews, his voice was thin, but his timing was perfect and he presented a hilarious stage persona."
- A description of the plot of the song would be nice in the "Production" section. Something along the lines of, "The song tells the story of a man who asks a soldier about life in the army. The soldier describes his hatred of waking up and of the bugler that plays reveille. He says that he hopes to become a bugler so that he can wake up the troops and return to bed."
- Was the song ever released on an album?
- The quotation in the lead section would be better if it was moved to later in the article. It could be replaced in the lead with a summary of the statement (eg. "Discussing his reasons for writing the song, Berlin said that reveille was his least favorite part of army life.").
- The Google Books references should be formatted with the {{cite book}} template found at Wikipedia:Citation templates.
- In the "Reception" section, the first sentence in the third paragraph has five references. It looks like something might have been removed, as reference 2 is placed there twice. How many of the references are actually relevant to that sentence?
I will place the nomination on hold for one week to allow for these concerns to be addressed and/or discussed. Any comments or questions can be left here, as I have the page on my watchlist. Best wishes, GaryColemanFan (talk) 05:50, 5 October 2008 (UTC)
- Hi, thanks very much for the swift review. Insightful feedback; I'll be on it soon. DurovaCharge! 06:18, 5 October 2008 (UTC)
- A week has passed, and these concerns remain. I am failing the review, but I urge future editors to use this feedback in preparing the article for its next GA nomination. GaryColemanFan (talk) 05:19, 12 October 2008 (UTC)
Dead Links
[edit]The wikipedia link for Kitchen Police
https://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=Kitchen_Police&action=edit&redlink=1
is dead as well as the associated reference link [12] to the 1984 edition of "The world of musical comedy" by Stanley Green. In fact, that edition may never have existed as a 1984 edition does not appear in the complete list of editions of this book
https://books.google.com/books?q=editions:ISBN0498014096]
I found 1974 and 1980 editions
https://books.google.com/books?id=_AwJAQAAMAAJ&q=Irving+Berlin+Kitchen+Police https://books.google.com/books?id=noufAAAAMAAJ&q=kitchen+police
but they reference different pages so it seem to not be just a simple typo by the original editor.
In addition, the original source for the sheet music images here and on wikisource
https://en.wikisource.org/wiki/Oh,_How_I_Hate_to_Get_Up_in_the_Morning
have changed. It appears that the John Hopkins music repository has changed the format of their links
from: http://levysheetmusic.mse.jhu.edu/levy-cgi/display.cgi?id=078.098.000;pages=3;range=0-2 to: http://levysheetmusic.mse.jhu.edu/collection/078/098
Since they have a huge collection of public domain titles I suspect that there are a very large number of dead links to their music on Wikipedia. Perhaps it is possible to make Global changes to Wikipedia links. I tried to correct the source link on the subject Wikisource commons page
https://en.wikisource.org/wiki/File:Oh_How_I_Hate_to_Get_up_in_the_Morning_1c.jpg
but there is no edit mode. I suspect why but this is not an uncommon issue. I am only an occasional contributor - I neither know how nor have an access level to do these fixes myself so the best I can do is post this alert. ArtKocsis (talk) 07:08, 16 October 2017 (UTC)