Talk:Nugroho Notosusanto/GA1

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Reviewer: Ed! (talk · contribs) 00:52, 12 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

"Professor" and "Brigadier General" shouldn't be titles toghether, as it's confusing to the layman that "Professor Brigadier General" isn't a rank.
- How would you organise it? Professor second? Choosing one or the other would be OR, I believe. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 05:04, 12 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"Despite wanting to remain in the military, influence by his father he continued his education," something is wrong with this sentence.
- Definitely. Fixed. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 05:04, 12 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"... he finished his senior high school eduction, despite wanting to continue with the Army." -- no caps on "Army" here.
- Debatable, as it could mean the Indonesian Army as an institution (see various articles on the US Army for examples). Decapped though. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 05:04, 12 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"the University of Indonesia (Universitas Indonesia, or UI)" if it is a non-english term it should be italicized.
- Done. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 05:04, 12 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"By the early 1960s Notosusanto had abandoned his literary career, focusing instead on history." -- this is sort of an abrupt transition. What prompted this?
- None of the sources say explicitly, although he clearly had much greater interest in history than literature. I've rearranged the section to make it a bit more evident. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 05:21, 12 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"as a modern museum showcasing the military's role." -- its role in what?
- Added — Crisco 1492 (talk) 05:04, 12 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Legacy section is very short. Expand or merge into another section.
- Expanded. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 05:21, 12 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Dup links tool returns no results. Dab links tool shows no errors. No problems with external links.
All images seem to be tagged and licensed appropriately. There are no apparent problems with stability in the article.

Will await responses. —Ed!^(talk) 04:32, 12 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Replied to several. Going back to the sources for two. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 05:04, 12 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
- Think I've gotten everything. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 09:02, 12 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Great work. Passing the article. —Ed!^(talk) 17:11, 12 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]