Talk:Nu-Clear Sounds/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 10:37, 25 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()

3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()

Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

My first review for you in a long time; will take this on soon! --K. Peake 10:37, 25 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox and lead

Separate studios in the infobox by using flatlist instead
Pipe Astoria to Astoria (recording studio)
Add a comma after debut studio album
Only introduce Charlotte Hatherley as being a guitarist since the Nightnurse part is too much detail for the lead
"joined the band." → "became a member."
"at a farmhouse in the country," what country? If not known, then only keep the farmhouse bit
"With sessions also held at" → "With additional sessions held at" to be more specific
Pipe Astoria to Astoria (recording studio)
"the band co-produced the proceedings with" → "Ash produced the proceedings alongside"
"Described as a garage rock album," → "A garage rock record," since "described" is not appropriate lead language
"the Rolling Stones, and" → "the Rolling Stones and" per British English
"inspired Nu-Clear Sounds." → "inspired the album."
"Preceded by the lead single" → "Preceded by Nu-Clear Sounds' lead single"
"and Europe until" → "and other parts of Europe until" since the UK is part of Europe (only left the EU!)
Pipe single to Single (music)
"the band played shows" → "Ash played shows"
"Australia, and Japan." → "Australia and Japan."
"they played a handful" → "they performed a handful"
"Nu-Clear Sounds was released in the US in September;" → "The album was released in the US in September 1999;"
Are you sure it is notable to mention here what songs are remixed or just write "three remixes"?
"at number 7 in the UK and charted in Australia, Germany, and Norway." → "at number seven in the UK, alongside reaching the top 50 in Australia, Norway and Scotland." per MOS:NUM and since the German position is too low to be notable for the lead
"Nu-Clear Sounds was certified" → "It was certified"
Mention the certification was by the British Phonographic Industry (BPI) at the end of the sentence

Background

Remove the commas after 1977 since this is in the body, not lead
"and Brian Bell, and dreamt" → "and Brian Bell; he dreamt"
"with the band" → "as part of Ash"
"the band had written" → "they had written"
Remove the comma before "while"
The source does not mention Ash wanting to break free from the Pop scene so maybe write "break free from the pigeonholing they experienced" instead
"while in Australia" → "while in Australia,"
"Mark Hamilton, and drummer" → "Mark Hamilton and drummer" but the members are not mentioned by the source
"and worked on" → "and working on"

Production

Retitle to Recording and production
"Chris Kimsey, and" → "Chris Kimsey and"
"They had previously built" → "Ash had previously built"
Pipe Mixing to Audio mixing (recorded music)
Pipe Astoria to Astoria (recording studio)
The studio info is not sourced
"Morris and the band mixed" → "Morris and Ash mixed"
"of "Low Ebb", and "I'm Gonna Fall", and added" → "of "Low Ebb" and "I'm Gonna Fall", alongside adding"

Composition

Retitle to Music and lyrics
"the Velvet Underground, and" → "the Velvet Underground and"
"except for "Projects"" → "with the exception of "Projects"" to be less repetitive
"solely by Hamilton), and" → "solely by Hamilton) and"
Shouldn't you write "hardcore songs" instead of "harder-sounding songs"?

The source (according to google translate) says "...series of hard clapping tracks..." I think they're referring to hard rock instead of hardcore punk. Yeepsi (talk) 17:16, 26 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

""Numberskull", and "Fortune Teller"" → ""Numberskull" and "Fortune Teller""
Pipe ballads to Sentimental ballad
""Aphrodite", and "I'm Gonna Fall"." → ""Aphrodite" and "I'm Gonna Fall"."
"the band were known for," → "Ash were known for,"
Are you sure the more aggressive quote should be included since that seems to be the tweet's indicator of hardcore?
Add a source at the end of the percussion/strings sentence
"with the sound of" → "with the sounds of"
Add release year of Star Wars in brackets
"evokes the sound of" → "evokes the sound of both"
"the New York Dolls, and uses a lot of" → "the New York Dolls, while it heavily features"
"for the album." → "for Nu-Clear Sounds.
"was most reminiscent of" → "was described by Hamilton as most reminiscent of"
"on 1977, and featured" → "on 1977 and features
"includes elements of" → "includes reminiscent of"
Remove comma after New Order
The source does not mention Kurtaine as being responsible for scratching
"The band said it was" → "Ash said it was"
"featured strings that Morris" → "features strings that Morris"

Release

Retitle to Release and promotion
"played a few European festivals" → "played a few festivals in mainland Europe"
"as the lead single on" → "as the album's lead single on" with the wikilink
Pipe CD to Compact disc
""Heroin, Vodka, White Noise", and the other with" → ""Heroin, Vodka, White Noise", while the other included"
"In October and early November," → "In October and early November 1998,"
"a tour of the UK." → "a tour of the United Kingdom."
"the band had been on" → "Ash had been on"
"the band embarked on a" → "Ash embarked on a"
"as the second single on" → "as the second single from Nu-Clear Sounds on"
""When I'm Tired", and the other" → ""When I'm Tired" and the other"
"The band played a" → "Ash played a"
I don't think brackets are needed around the info saying who the original songs are by
Wikilink music video
"premiered on The Jo Whiley Show on 5 May." → "premiered for The Jo Whiley Show on 5 May 1999."
"In June, the band" → "In June 1999, the band"
"shows in the US, and" → "shows in the US and"
"The band played a few" → "Ash played a few"
"in June, and then in August," → "in June and then in August,"
"on 28 September through" → "on 28 September 1999 through"
"of the songs, and remixed" → "of the songs and remixed"
""Wildsurf", and "Folk Song"" → ""Wildsurf" and "Folk Song""
"he had liked the album and" → "he was found of the album and"
"The band planned to promote" → "They planned to promote"
"the band's first compilation album" → "Ash's first compilation album" with the wikilink
""Wildsurf", and "Numbskull"." → ""Wildsurf" and "Numbskull"." on any occasions
Remove commas around their second compilation album
Wikilink 7" vinyl per MOS:LINK2SECT
Remove commas around their third compilation album
""Jesus Says", and "Wildsurf"." → ""Jesus Says" and "Wildsurf"."

Reception

"appeal" of Ash's debut," → "appeal" of 1977,"
"Hatherley "galvanizes ..." → "He further wrote that Hatherley "galvanizes ..."
"of the songs were" → "of the songs are"
"wrote the album saw the band" → "wrote the album sees Ash"
"found the album delivered" → "found Nu-Clear Sounds delivered"
"there was "enough" → "there is "enough"
"said the band "are" → "said Ash "are"
"the band were "far" → "the band are "far"
"said that as the band got older," → "said that as Ash get older,"
Remove comma after the UK position and move the UK ref to the end of the sentence too
"in Australia,[68] and" → "in Australia and" moving [68] to the end of the sentence
Mention the organization that awarded the certification in the UK and how many units this has pushed, plus this should be by the UK/Scotland positions
"and number 15 in" → "alongside reaching number 15 in"
"and number 31 in" → "while it peaked at number 31 in"
The UK singles positions are unsourced

Track listing

Pipe "Numbskull" to Numbskull (song)

Personnel

Seems disorganized or is this the way it is ordered in the booklet?

Per order in the booklet. Yeepsi (talk) 17:16, 26 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Charts and certifications

Good

References

Copyvio score looks fantastic at 16.0%!!!!
Are you sure the Twitter accounts should be mentioned in titles when you already have done this for the authors?
Pipe Rock Hard to Rock Hard (magazine) on ref 24
Wikilink The Irish Times on ref 27
Wikilink Exclaim! on ref 41
WP:OVERLINK of BMG on ref 60
Pipe Pitchfork to Pitchfork (website) on ref 64
Should The Observer Review be piped to The Observer or is it a different publication?

Final comments and verdict

On hold until everything is fixed; this did not take too long! --K. Peake 16:34, 26 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

@Kyle Peake: Made the changes; added two comments above. Yeepsi (talk) 17:16, 26 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Yeepsi ✓ Pass now, after I did very brief copy editing! --K. Peake 20:23, 26 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]