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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 16:50, 8 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]


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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()
3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()
Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

I will review this soon, hopefully leading to you having the last GA required to nominate the Notes on a Conditional Form GT! --K. Peake 16:50, 8 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the review! This is the last one, so hopefully GT soon! Giacobbe talk 18:43, 8 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox and lead

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  • Should electro be piped to electronic music or Electro (music)?
  • Pipe Matthew Healy to Matty Healy under songwriter(s) and in the lead prose
  • There is a rule that everything in the lead needs to be mentioned in the body, so write out the writers and producers there
  • "The song's creation was" → "Its creation was"
  • Again, should electro be piped to electronic music or Electro (music)?
  • Remove hip hop from the groove part because this is too much detail for the lead
  • Either add sacred diagrams to what footage appears or only keep the first two and add "among others" at the end of the sentence

Background and development

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  • Quote box and first para both look good!
  • "began with a piano piece" → "came from a piano piece"
  • Wikilink breakbeat
  • Pipe loop to Loop (music)
  • Wikilink J Dilla
  • "said the song's creation was" → "said parts of the song's creation were"
  • The notes do not appear to show him mentioning artists failing to take a stance, unless I misinterpreted it?
  • "I find that a lot of people who are out there doing their thing musically, who aren’t challenging any ideas, are only made interesting through association or projection. I don’t feel like a lot of people stand by stuff." I just paraphrased the last sentence. Giacobbe talk 12:30, 9 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • ""If you give" → ""[I]f you give" per the source

Music and lyrics

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  • Audio sample looks good!
  • Again, should electro be piped to electronic music or Electro (music)?
  • "about himself from past tracks." → "about himself from their lyrics." to be less repetitive
  • [23] should be solely at the end of the sentence
  • Pipe low-pitched to Pitch (music)
  • The quote in the last sentence is not sourced

Reception

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  • "praising its "grandeur" → "praising the "grandeur" to avoid using "it" or "the song" too close to the last instances
  • "while noting it explores" → "while noting the song explores"
  • Why is Kitty Empire mentioned as writing for The Observer when this review was clearly a piece for The Guardian?
  • "for the band." → "for the 1975."
  • "the album's "more successful" → "the album's "[m]ore successful"
  • "saying: "The 1975 are" → "saying it is an example of where "[t]he 1975 are"
  • "radio-friendly hooks."" → "radio-friendly hooks"." per MOS:QUOTE
  • Three reviews in one sentence is too much so give the musicOMH one its own sentence: "On a similar note, Ross Horton of musicOMH called it" or "called the bridge" if the source mentions that part specifically
  • "deconstruction of the band's" → "deconstruction of the 1975's"
  • Make the Pitchfork review its one sentence per my earlier comment
  • Wikilink UK Singles Chart

Music video

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  • Img looks good!
  • Remove wikilink on Music for Cars Tour
  • The release date and 11th release part are unsourced, so use [37] after the first two sentences since it backs them up
  • Why are nematodes and eels listed in a different order from the source here?
  • "it is intended to" → "the 1975 asserted that it is intended to" to attribute the quote properly

Charts

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  • Good

References

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  • Copyvio score looks decent at 35.5%
  • The only issue with the refs is that the archive tool hasn't been run on them, so make sure to do that through history
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  • Good

Final comments and verdict

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  • (CA)Giacobbe ✓ Pass now, the archives not being able to be added is not an issue since the tool often breaks and you can do this at a later date. Good luck with your GT, plus it is fine that your exam caused a delay – I'll be on here less now that I start work at McDonald's in three days! --K. Peake 18:57, 9 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]
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