Talk:Not Myself Tonight/GA1

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Reviewer: Calvin999 (talk · contribs) 09:31, 5 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]

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We have connection issue here

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is a song by → is a song recorded by
American recording artist → American singer and songwriter
, taken from her sixth → for her sixth
It was released on April 6, 2010 by RCA Records as the lead single from the record. → It was released by RCA Records as the lead single from the album on April 6, 2010.
The song was written and produced by Polow da Don, with additional songwriting provided by Ester Dean, Jason Perry, and Greg Curtis. "Not Myself Tonight" is an → Produced by Polow da Don and co-written in collaboration with Ester Dean, Jason Perry and Greg Curtis, "Not Myself Tonight" is an
song which talks about Aguilera's adopting a different persona on the dance floor. → song, which explores Aguilera's adoption of different personas on the dance floor.
, who were ambivalent towards its overall production. → Why? Not really sure what to take from this.
The song peaked at number twenty three on the U.S. →In the United States, the song peaked at number 23 on the
, and respectively reached numbers one and fourteen on the Billboard Hot Dance Club Songs and Mainstream Top 40 component charts. → . It peaked at number 14 on the Pop Songs chart, and number one on the Hot Dance Club Songs. (It would be really good if you could find a source stating that it was her fourth number one).
The track charted moderately on international record charts, and reached the top-twenty in countries including Canada, the Netherlands, and the United Kingdom. → Elsewhere, the song peaked inside the top twenty of the singles charts in Canada, the Netherlands and the United Kingdom.
Paying tribute to the video for "Human Nature" by Madonna, → Serving as an homage to the music video for "Human Nature", a song recorded by Madonna,
Aguilera performed "Not Myself Tonight" on several television shows, including the 2010 MTV Movie Awards and an episode of VH1 Storytellers. → To promote the song, Aguilera performed "Not Myself Tonight" at the 2010 MTV Movie Awards, VH1 Storytellers and The Oprah Winfrey Show, amongst others.

Done HĐ (talk) 03:12, 11 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Background and release

On the album, entitled Bionic, Aguilera was inspired by electronic genres, which she heard a lot during her pregnancy. → Aguilera listened to a lot of electronic music during her pregnancy, and she was inspired to include the genre on Bionic.

Done HĐ (talk) 03:12, 11 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Perhaps also include the digital release dates and discuss the remixes?

Not done There is already a table for the song's release history, so I think it would be clichéd to discuss the song's releases in the section. HĐ (talk) 03:12, 11 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Composition

The whole section feels quite jilted to be honest. It's lots of very short sentences which is quite disruptive to the flow. It's always better to try and link one sentence to another use a comma or semi-colon instead of lots of full stops.

I have tweaked this section a bit. HĐ (talk) 04:24, 11 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Critical reception

Same for this section. It just reads like he said, she said, he said. The sentences need to be linked to together more eloquently and to improve the flow, perhaps combining some reviewers into the same sentence if they share a common sentiment or thought?
WP:QUOTEFARM is an issue. Some need paraphrasing.

I have tweaked the section a bit. HĐ (talk) 03:53, 11 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Chart performance

on US radio →on U.S. radio
No need to bracket the debuts, include them as normal prose in the sentence.
Again, if you could possibly source that it became her 4th number one on the Dance chart then that would be really good.
In Australia, "Not Myself Tonight" debuted and peaked at number 22 on the ARIA Charts, → No ned to say Australia as well as ARIA, it's like saying Australia twice. Just use one or the other.
No need to two paragraphs here, the second is very short. Just one would do.

Done all except for the 4th number-one detail. HĐ (talk) 04:11, 11 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Music video

Don't think you need to have titled sub-sections, there isn't masses of info for each one. It makes it look a bit disjointed. Just the four paragraphs would suffice without titled sub-sections.
I'd have the two photos side by side, not one under the other. I thought it was one picture at first, not two pictures.

Done

Weekly charts

I'd put Dance before Mainstream Top 40, just my OCD alphabetical-ness.

Done

Certifications

You could include that sales of RIAA here, just don't include a certification.

Done HĐ (talk) 04:24, 11 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]

References

MTV sources need Viacom as the publisher.
Publishers are missing from quite a lot. In fact, nearly all.

Not done I don't think we need publishers (i.e. Rolling Stone (Wenner Media) or MTV News (Viacom)) per recent FAs and GAs. HĐ (talk) 04:11, 11 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Status

On hold, 7 days — ₳aron 16:05, 10 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]

@Calvin999: I have addressed nearly all the issues. HĐ (talk) 01:56, 12 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Great, I'm passing the article. Well done. — ₳aron 09:03, 12 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]

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