Talk:Not Commercial/GA1

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Reviewer: SNUGGUMS (talk · contribs) 19:00, 23 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Seems rather short from a glance compared to other album articles, but I'll look deeper. Expect comments within one or two weeks. Snuggums (talk / edits) 19:00, 23 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]

See above note on Artistdirect
"music critics" is a commonly recognized term and doesn't need to be linked per WP:OVERLINK
"and that her writing skills were underrated" seems like it's missing "felt" right before "that"

The quote on poetry should come after the "she said about being inspired to write songs", and I'd try something like "she said of the tracks"
this doesn't indicate It's a Man's World was her 21st album, so let's find another citation to establish album count for that as well as Believe and maybe
"described the content of the album as being" → "described the album's content as"
There was only one "Golden Ticket", not three
No need to mention Mattel
The quote is "bitter ballad", not "yearning ballad"

I'm not so sure it's necessary to state track count in here; that's what tracklist sections are for
"'Runnin is described by the singer as her 'in a nutshell, isn't it!'." needs a citation
The source used for "With or Without You" and "Fit to Fly" doesn't support any of the assertions you've listed except for saluting soldiers, but I did find some support here for the "late-'80s" bit included on "Fit to Fly"
The description for "Disaster Cake" could use something more specific, namely what Cher was saying about this past girlfriend
I made a slight adjustment to fit a full quote

Only three reviews? Even for something that didn't have a commercial release (hence its title), this seems rather short.
"not.com.mercial received positive reviews from music critics" is a violation of WP:SYNTH without a citation specifically supporting this assertion; you can't just form a conclusion solely based on a few samples.
"rated the album as B−" → "gave the album a B− rating"
"sullen, mid-tempo bunch, modestly hooky at best" actually applies to the album's tracks as a whole, not just the Cobain tribute

Sgt. Pepper's needs to be italicized as it is an album
"she wanted to be a nun when she attended Catholic school as a child, and said she has known" is blatantly plagiarized from MTV; absolutely unacceptable

While it might be harder to do without an iTunes release, this section does need a citation, particularly for the song durations

Prose: Copyright violations are an automatic fail, and other parts could also use work
Referencing: One questionable source, and many instances of text not being supported by given citations
Coverage: One song description and perhaps the "reception" section as a whole could use more development. Given the "Golden ticket" contest in the album's copies, is anything available on sales even if it was a really low figure? I would also indicate whether Cher promoted this album at all.
Neutrality: As far as I can tell, this is free of bias
Stability: Seems fine to me
Media: Album cover has an appropriate FUR
Verdict: Sorry, but I'm failing this without putting it on hold mainly due to prose and referencing issues. It could also probably be expanded somewhat, even if there's only a limited amount of material available on this compared to her other work. Better luck next time. Snuggums (talk / edits) 23:01, 29 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]