Talk:Norman Whiteside/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Lemonade51 (talk · contribs) 12:05, 14 June 2012 (UTC)

General

• No problems with sourcing Is nifootball.blogspot.co.uk considered a WP:RS?
• No problems with imaging, given none are used

Lead

• The lead does not follow WP:LEAD. For one, refs in the lead are unnecessary because if something is mentioned there, it should be expanded upon the body.
• I suggest you also remove references in the infobox.
• "He began his career at Manchester United" → "Whiteside began his career at Manchester United"

Early years

• "because of his aggressive, physical playing style he was later nicknamed the "Shankill Skinhead" ", by whom?
• "He was 'discovered' by Ipswich Town scout Jim Rodgers", I'm guessing it is ambiguous that Jim Rodgers had discovered him? How about, "He was said to have been discovered by..."

Manchester United

• "From age 14 he was...", place comma between 14 and he
• "signing a three year contract", three-year is hyphenated
• "Whiteside hit four goals in the first five games of the campaign", thinking of the reader here, I suggest you replace 'hit' with 'scored'
• seventeen-game also hyphenated
• helping the "Red Devils", unless you introduce who the 'Red Devils' are, it's best to leave it as 'Manchester United'
• FA Cup Semi-finals → FA Cup semi-finals
• "his regularly excellent performances" → "his consistent performances"
• Any reason why he rejected the chance to join AC Milan?
• trophyless is one word
• "However injury to midfielder", place comma between however and injury
• "Whiteside scored the only hat-trick", best to wikilink hat-trick for the reader
• "4–2 home win over West Ham United on 9 March", 9 March 1957? Or 3013? Going by WP:CONSISTENCY and how you have presented the date format before, best to add the year -- even though I'm aware every season is a paragraph.
• "The goal typified his vision, timing, and precise shooting", I'm not too sure about this sentence. It sorta reads as if the audience should be away of his main attributes, which might not be the case. I have managed to obtain the 1985 match report on the Guardian archives, perhaps you can rejig to include a neat quote by Whiteside in that article.
• "even at the age of 21 his right knee", comma between 21 and his
• "best performance of his career at Anfield on 4 April", again year could be added
• midway does not need to be hyphenated

Everton

• "name to a tabloid article criticizing Ferguson", criticising should be spelt in British English

Personal life and post-retirement

• "With the help of Rob Bagchi" → "With the help of writer Rob Bagchi"

On hold for seven days. -- Lemonade51 (talk) 12:05, 14 June 2012 (UTC)

I have accepted all your comments and changed the article accordingly.--EchetusXe 14:32, 18 June 2012 (UTC)