Talk:Nikolai Tikhonov/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Lord Roem (talk) 03:21, 20 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I will be reviewing this article. Cheers, Lord Roem (talk) 03:21, 20 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Section by section review

Lead

Done Confusing: "As many like him Tikhonov climbed up the Soviet hierarchy through the 'industrial ladder'; by 1963 he had become Deputy Chairman of the Gosplan."
- GDone rammar issue + change the 1963 office to a broader statement of his climb. "From peasant to Vice Premier" as an example.
Besides that, good!

Early life and career

Done I'm unsure of the policy on this, but maybe remove the red links.
Done Comma after '1930 to 1941'
Done That same sentence is a run-on
Done "that he met" in first sentence of first paragraph
Why? Change link of All-Union Communists to labeling it 'Bolshevik' Party for clarity sake.
- The party wasn't known as the Bolshevik Party in the 1920s, 1930s and other decades. The official name of the party was the All-Union Communist Party, I can change it to Communist Party if that term is better. Is it? --TIAYN (talk) 18:43, 21 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  - Its fine as it is. Sorry. It looked like you had forgot to put a | in an internal link since it had part of the name in parenthesis. -- Lord Roem (talk) 07:03, 22 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Done Comma after 'As a director'
Done Call 'Great Patriotic War' what it is - WWII.
Done Last sentence of second paragraph - change to "...became a member of the Central Committee."

Done *First sentence of last paragraph, change to "When Alexi Kosygin, the then current First Deputy, was on sick leave..."

Done "...was elected a candidate member of the..."

Premiership (1980-85)

Done Need cite for "not producing enough grain".
Done Need cite for "Tikhonov acknowledged..." sentence's claim
Working Complete a copyedit for this section. Lots of commas missing.
Done Last sentence here seems extraneous - suggesting removal.
Maybe put a picture here to make it easier to read the long block of text.
- There are no pictures of him, and there are nearly no free pictures from this period. None of Soviet officials related to Tikhonov in any major way. --TIAYN (talk) 18:43, 21 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Later life and death (1985-97)

Done Need a cite to claim that his resignation was "forced"
Yes Is "Secretaryship" a word?
- It is used on the List of leaders of the Soviet Union which passed WP:FL. --TIAYN (talk) 18:43, 21 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  - In that case keep it. :) -- Lord Roem (talk) 07:03, 22 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Done The view was strengthened - fix in 2nd sentence.
Done Need cite for the 'hermit' quote.
Done Comma after "According to Time magazine..."
Done Change title of section to "Later life and death". Removing the years are key because of the later references to things built in his honor; all of which happened after he died.

Refs/Biblio.

Done The Zemtsov source has spacing issues between the title of the book and the publisher name.

Concluding Thoughts

Article copyedit is recommended.
- I've requested a copyedit from the Guild of Copy Editors; is it okay to put this article on hold until a outside editor decides to copyedit the article? --TIAYN (talk) 10:21, 22 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  - I will hold this open until that process is done. I'll change the status to hold later today (when I'm not in a rush). -- Lord Roem (talk) 12:58, 22 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Lots of sentences seem to run-on.

You have a week's time to resolve the concerns before a decision on promotion will be made. Best regards, Lord Roem (talk) 18:02, 21 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Good work so far. :-) Lord Roem (talk) 07:03, 22 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I just read through the article again. Much better and greater clarity! :) Would you like me to now reassess it for promotion or are you still working on it? Lord Roem (talk) 17:55, 23 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks! :D I'm more or less finished, if you feel it meets the GA criteria please reassess it! As you already know I'm waiting for the Guild of Copyeditors to copyedit this article; nothing more! --TIAYN (talk) 18:22, 23 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Then if it's all right with you, I'll just wait for one of them to go over it. That way I can look over the best version of the article. Note that I have alot of stuff on my watchlist, so please feel free to post a note on my talk page if I don't realize the copyedit has happened. Cheers, Lord Roem (talk) 18:34, 23 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]