Talk:Nigeria EduSat-1/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Argento Surfer (talk · contribs) 15:03, 29 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

It may take me a day or two to complete the review. If you disagree with any of my comments, don't hesitate to argue them - I'm willing to be persuaded. Once complete, I'll be using this review to score points in the 2018 wikicup. Argento Surfer (talk) 15:03, 29 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Is it well written?
A. The prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct:
Lead
I think the second sentence and first half of the first sentence should be swapped. ("Nigeria EduSat-1 is a satellite was built by the Federal University of Technology Akure (FUTA), created in conjunction with the Japanese Birds-1 program. It is Nigeria's first satellite built by a university")
Done Kees08 (Talk)

Background
This section says the Bird program helps countries build their first satellite. If this is Nigeria's first satellite, that seems equally as notable as being the first one built by a Nigerian university. If it's not, the text needs to be clarified.
From what I understand (if I am not mixing up my countries), another satellite is considered Nigeria's first, and this is considered their first university satellite. I did not want to go off on an irrelevant tangent in the article about it, but I can definitely make a little paragraph talking about it if you think that would help. Kees08 (Talk)

The article says 5 countries participated but only names 4. Was Japan the other one?
Done. Also put them in alphabetical order, do not want to leave them in a random order to construe some sort of importance level. (also, yes it was Japan) Kees08 (Talk)

Development
"The university partnered with [...] NASRDA" ...to do what? If it was designing and building, this should be combined with the first sentence.
I moved some stuff around and rephrased, is it more clear? Kees08 (Talk)

Camera should be plural.
Done, and removed the 'a' that would have made it grammatically incorrect Kees08 (Talk)

"the rest of the satellite fleet" - what fleet? This is the first mention of other satellites. This sentence would also read better if this section were moved to the end. ("and will take images of Nigeria with the rest...")
Added a sentence to the background that maybe helps clarify? Kees08 (Talk)

"The satellite also has a speaker, which transmits songs..." - this can't be right. A speaker would be useless in space. Is this a transmitter?
...in my defense, I knew that it would be useless, but I thought it was just a weird outreach thing. I think I read a poorly translated article at some point. Anyways, I have corrected all this. Kees08 (Talk)

"as an outreach project" to whom? aliens or other countries?
Done Kees08 (Talk)

link Satellite constellation
Done Kees08 (Talk)

The second paragraph in this section should be combined with Background. It's already repeating some of the information and presents some facts that should come before the first paragraph, like the other satellites.
Done Kees08 (Talk)

Mission
no concern.

Future
See section 3 below

B. It complies with the manual of style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation:
no concern
Is it verifiable with no original research?
A. It contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline:
please link Heavens-Above, AllAfrica.com, Premium Times, Naij, Ghana News Agency, and Face2Face Africa in your references.
Done Kees08 (Talk)

B. All in-line citations are from reliable sources, including those for direct quotations, statistics, published opinion, counter-intuitive or controversial statements that are challenged or likely to be challenged, and contentious material relating to living persons—science-based articles should follow the scientific citation guidelines:
no concern

C. It contains no original research:
no concern

D. It contains no copyright violations nor plagiarism:
Per earwig, the two sentences in "Background" match this site verbatim, but that page is dated December 2017 and the material was present in the article in August 2017.
Is it broad in its coverage?
A. It addresses the main aspects of the topic:
Is there any information available about how long this satellite is expected to operate?
I checked again and found nothing. I do not think it is published anywhere, I looked when I wrote the article as well. Kees08 (Talk)

Do the other 4 satellites in the constellation have articles? If not, why is this one more notable? If so, are they all notable individually, or should they be merged into one group article?
All of the satellites have their own article except for TOKI. I could not find enough information to generate an article for it (I tried, a draft of it was just deleted recently). I also have the Birds-1 article, and plan to make Birds project and Birds-2 after the second constellation is launched (or cancelled I suppose). Kees08 (Talk)

B. It stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style):
The future section is one sentence about the future of the Birds program, not the satellite. I'm not sure this is the right article for the information.
I can delete it and just leave it in the Birds-1 main article if you think that is best? Kees08 (Talk)
Is it neutral?
It represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each:
no concern
Is it stable?
It does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute:
no concern
Is it illustrated, if possible, by images?
A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:
image is public domain

B. Images are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
caption and alt text are both good.
Overall:
Pass or Fail:
There are some significant issues that need to be addressed before I can pass this. Argento Surfer (talk) 17:55, 29 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]

@Argento Surfer: I addressed or at least commented on all your points I think. Also, if you were done with your initial review, it is helpful to change the status of the GA on the talk page to onhold, so that I get a notification to work on the article. If you were not done reviewing, well at least I got a head start! Let me know how you want to finish out the rest of the points. Kees08 (Talk) 03:02, 31 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]

@Kees08: - For some reason, I always forget to update the talk page status. Sorry about that.

I went ahead and deleted the future section since you indicated that would be fine with you. I also added an s to the part about Japan helping countries build satellites. Seems the easiest way to convey the information without going off on a tangent. Everything else looks good. Nice work. Argento Surfer (talk) 14:11, 31 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]