Talk:Nico Hischier/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 17:03, 17 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

"Hischier made his pro debut in his native Switzerland in 2015," - professional
Spell out QMJHL in the lead

"a major junior team in the Quebec Major Junior Hockey League (QMJHL), selected Hischier selected 6th overall]] in the 2016 CHL Import Draft," - repetition of selected and remove the two brackets at the end of this particular text. And spell out CHL and put the acronym in parentheses.
"(the QMJHL, the Ontario Hockey League, and the Western Hockey League." - add parentheses after the period
"For this he was awarded the RDS Cup for the QMJHL Rookie of the Year and awarded the Michael Bossy Trophy as the best pro prospect in the league, and named to the QMJHL Rookie All-Star Team." - change this text so it reads as follows For this Hischier was awarded the RDS Cup for the QMJHL Rookie of the Year and the Michael Bossy Trophy as the best professional prospect in the league. He was additionally named to the QMJHL Rookie All-Star Team.
"He would also be named the rookie of the year for the Canadian Hockey League (CHL)," - the acronym of the Canadian Football League will be just fine in this instance.
Wikilink rookie of the year to the CHL Rookie of the Year article

"while his first two goals came on 19 October against Craig Anderson of the Ottawa Senators." - needs to change to while his first two goals came ten days later against Craig Anderson of the Ottawa Senators.

"Hischier scored one goal as the Swiss finished fourth overall." - Swiss team
Delink 2017 NHL Entry Draft
"He also participated at the 2017 IIHF World U18 Championships," - reword to Hischier also partook at the 2017 IIHF World U18 Championships so it is not too similar to the sentence that precedes this text.

"Hischier comes from a family of athletes, as his father Rino played football for FC Naters and his mother Katja worked as a sports teacher. " - Hischier comes from a family of athletes; his father Rino played football for FC Naters and his mother Katja worked as a sports teacher.

This article will be placed on hold until the all of the points have been responded to. MWright96 (talk) 20:38, 17 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]

@Kaiser matias: Yes, you have addressed all the points. This article can now be promoted to GA class. MWright96 (talk) 08:08, 18 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]