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GA Review

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Reviewer: BelovedFreak 14:43, 25 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for criteria)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose): b (MoS):
    Well writte, lead covers main points. Just a few suggestions below.
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
    One link not working.
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects): b (focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
    Neutral and balanced.
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
    No problems here.
  6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
    One free image with appropriate license.
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:
GA criteria
  • The link to artery.com.au is redirecting to their homepage.
  • That does the trick!
Further suggestions

Prose

  • I'm no expert on this stuff, so by all means take these suggestions with a pinch of salt!
  • "Commencing painting in 1997, Ngoia Pollard won a major..." - might sound better starting with the noun: "Ngoia Pollard commenced painting in 1997 and won a major..." - also avoids two "ing"s next to each other
  • "She went on to the painting prize..." - should this be She went on to win the painting prize...?
  • "Marrying Jack Tjampitjinpa, they moved to Kintore..." - doesn't sound quite right; they doesn't match marrying. Perhaps She married Jack Tjampitjinpa and they moved to Kintore
  • "In 1997, Ngoia Pollard began painting independently, and by 2004 won the first prize..." - I think this should be and by 2004 had won the first prize or and in 2004 won the first prize
  • "Western Desert artists such as Ngoia Pollard will frequently paint particular 'dreamings', or stories..." - is will necessary here?

Other

  • Ok, I know it's only short, I guess I just have a short concentration span, but by the time I got to "Career", I could have used a link to Mount Liebig. It's at that point, when it's directly relevant to her work, that I wanted to click to that article, especially if that article is developed further in the future.

Another great Aussie artist article (alliteration!); just one external link in the references to be fixed and I will be happy to list the article.--BelovedFreak 14:43, 25 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Ok, I'm happy to list this as a good article now. Well done!--BelovedFreak 16:58, 26 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]