Talk:Netherlands at the 2014 Winter Paralympics/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Kees08 (talk · contribs) 18:58, 8 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Rate	Attribute	Review Comment
1. Well-written:
	1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct.	~~7→seven 7 competitors~~ Should the NPC be in Dutch in the sidebar? ~~I do not think The should be capitalized here? gold medal, The Netherlands ranked a~~ ~~A Kloo for a COI? Just kidding... Kees-Jan van der Klooster~~ ~~Exact birthdate seems weird there, maybe just a year or work his age into the sentence instead? was born on 3 July 1977, and broke his back in 2001,~~ ~~Missing a space, same with ref 16 a standing position.[15]He entered~~ ~~You have a stray pipe by downhill. downhill,~~ ~~Both run times? both runs times~~ Hedging your bets on the hyphen? thirty-four seconds and one minute twenty seconds ~~Should alpine be lower case? discipline of Alpine skiing,~~ Maybe I am about to learn something new today. Can you use semicolons like this? I thought it had to be commas or an em dash. ; Merijn Koek (born 19 July 1990)[27] and Chris Vos (born 25 February 1998)[28]; Maybe use their ages instead of the birthday ~~Typo: she pposted the~~ capitalize Parade of Nations for the parade of nations during Ref after punctuation and the super-G[12][13], Too many short sentences in a row: Anna Jochemsen was born in 1985.[20] She entered all five standing races in alpine skiing. She was classified as an LW2.
	1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation.	~~Infobox website is a dead link. Also, I did not check this on the first three reviews I did, can you go back and verify they function properly? Should go to the respective NOC or NPC sites.~~ Non-GA Comment: put refs in numerical order if you feel like it: [36][31]
2. Verifiable with no original research:
	2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline.
	2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose).
	2c. it contains no original research.
	2d. it contains no copyright violations or plagiarism.
3. Broad in its coverage:
	3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic.
	3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style).
	4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each.
	5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.
6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio:
	6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content.	Flag is fine File:Bibian Mentel-Spee.png is a screenshot of a YouTube video, marked for Creative Commons, CC BY. This license is fine for Wiki, so everything is fine here.
	6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions.	~~Snowboard cross is not a proper noun.~~
	7. Overall assessment.

Corrected everything mentioned so far, Kees08. Courcelles (talk) 13:16, 10 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]

This is pretty cool if you have not seen it.

Not sure if you can work this in or this. You might be able to write about how the race went (like he slid out during the first turn (note: I forget which turn he slid out on) and into the wall). With the low amount of sources in the Paralympic Games, we should probably make use of the videos to find out what happened for the DNF and DQs the best we can. Can you look for them for the other athletes as well, and try to describe what happened? Kees08 (Talk) 08:34, 11 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]

I'm having major display problems with this article... spaces are there in the code, but not displaying, pipes are not there in the code, but are displaying... can you check the actual Wikitext and see if any of these errors are real or if they're all MediaWiki bugs? Courcelles (talk) 12:18, 11 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Fixed everything, some with unorthodox solutions, this is ready for another look, Kees08, Courcelles (talk) 15:01, 11 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]
@Courcelles: I think it was because a table header was moved above a paragraph. I moved it where it should go and removed the non-breaking spaces. I added a few more comments above as well, I can give it a final once-over when those have been addressed. Kees08 (Talk) 06:28, 14 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]

As to the hyphens, twenty is a normal noun, while thirty-four is a compound noun, properly taking a hyphen. All the rest addressed, Kees08. Courcelles (talk) 17:33, 14 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]