Talk:Nelson Ludington/GA1
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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 13:12, 5 October 2020 (UTC)
Am reviewing this for the GAN October 2020 Backlog Drive. MWright96 (talk) 13:12, 5 October 2020 (UTC)
- It is reasonably well written.
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
- a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- No edit wars, etc.:
- It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- Overall:
- Pass/Fail:
- Pass/Fail:
Lead
[edit]- Wikilink Upper Peninsula of Michigan
- Done
Ancestry
[edit]- "William (b. 1608) and his wife Ellen (b. 1617)" - born 1608 and born 1617 respectively
- Done
- Wikilink New York to New York (state)
- Done
Life
[edit]- "Ludington was born January 18, 1818," - born on January 18
- Done
- "His parents were Frederick Ludington and Susannah Griffeth." - Any information on their occupations?
- Done
- "Ludington was the fourth of their sixteen children.[6] The youth received private schooling by tutors for his early education." - consider merging these two sentences together
- Done
- "at a general store at Cold Spring, New York," - in
- Done
- "and received further training in retail business." - where did Ludington receive this training?
- Done
- Wikilink Great Lakes to the relevant article on its first mention
- Done
- Wikilink sawmill on the first mention
- Done
- Think the fourth and fifth paragraphs can be joined together
- Done
- "Royce spelled it as Escanawba. That was entered with the state in 1863 as the legal name for the town." - think these two sentences could be combined
- Done
- "simplifying the spelling. [18]" - the extra space between the period and the citation is not needed
- Done
- "the main docks and lumber yards of the firm were at Milwaukee." - in
- Done
- "the main docks and lumber yards of the firm were at Milwaukee. It was the main distribution point to places throughout the United States via shipping on the Great Lakes."
- Think merging these portions of text will help matters here
- Done
Marriage and family
[edit]- "Ludington died January 15, 1883," - died on January 15
- Done
- Perhaps mention he died from a short-term illness
- Done
Legacy
[edit]- The two bulletpoints should not exist and the information contained within them be in ordinary prose
- Done
References
[edit]- All mentions of newspapers.com should begin with a capital letter
- Done
- Reference 12 is missing the author
- Done
- Referecnce 25's page number should be in its own field not in the work field
- Done
- Reference 29 is missing the access date and publisher
- Done
Will put the review on hold to allow the nominator to address or query the points raised above. MWright96 (talk) 19:55, 5 October 2020 (UTC)
- Working --Doug Coldwell (talk) 21:34, 5 October 2020 (UTC)
- @MWright96: All issues have been addressed. Can you take another look. Thanks. --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:09, 10 October 2020 (UTC)
- @Doug Coldwell: Now promoting to GA class. MWright96 (talk) 19:22, 10 October 2020 (UTC)