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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 13:12, 5 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Am reviewing this for the GAN October 2020 Backlog Drive. MWright96 (talk) 13:12, 5 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects): b (focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:

Lead

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  • Wikilink Upper Peninsula of Michigan
  •  Done

Ancestry

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  • "William (b. 1608) and his wife Ellen (b. 1617)" - born 1608 and born 1617 respectively
  •  Done
  •  Done

Life

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  • "Ludington was born January 18, 1818," - born on January 18
  •  Done
  • "His parents were Frederick Ludington and Susannah Griffeth." - Any information on their occupations?
  •  Done
  • "Ludington was the fourth of their sixteen children.[6] The youth received private schooling by tutors for his early education." - consider merging these two sentences together
  •  Done
  • "at a general store at Cold Spring, New York," - in
  •  Done
  • "and received further training in retail business." - where did Ludington receive this training?
  •  Done
  • Wikilink Great Lakes to the relevant article on its first mention
  •  Done
  • Wikilink sawmill on the first mention
  •  Done
  • Think the fourth and fifth paragraphs can be joined together
  •  Done
  • "Royce spelled it as Escanawba. That was entered with the state in 1863 as the legal name for the town." - think these two sentences could be combined
  •  Done
  • "simplifying the spelling. [18]" - the extra space between the period and the citation is not needed
  •  Done
  • "the main docks and lumber yards of the firm were at Milwaukee." - in
  •  Done
  • "the main docks and lumber yards of the firm were at Milwaukee. It was the main distribution point to places throughout the United States via shipping on the Great Lakes."

- Think merging these portions of text will help matters here

  •  Done

Marriage and family

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  • "Ludington died January 15, 1883," - died on January 15
  •  Done
  • Perhaps mention he died from a short-term illness
  •  Done

Legacy

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  • The two bulletpoints should not exist and the information contained within them be in ordinary prose
  •  Done

References

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  • All mentions of newspapers.com should begin with a capital letter
  •  Done
  • Reference 12 is missing the author
  •  Done
  • Referecnce 25's page number should be in its own field not in the work field
  •  Done
  • Reference 29 is missing the access date and publisher
  •  Done

Will put the review on hold to allow the nominator to address or query the points raised above. MWright96 (talk) 19:55, 5 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]