Talk:Nazanin Aghakhani
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Copyvio
[edit]I'm afraid your Duplicate Detector is a joke. It highlights mostly proper nouns, such as names of colleagues, schools, festivals etc. as copyright infringments. If you list a young person's notable life events in a brief way, of course the same words appear in roughly the same order no matter who writes the bio. How do you paraphrase a name!?? –Kotivalo (talk) 19:58, 2 November 2013 (UTC)
- Let's look at one of the passages that the duplicate detector was still highlighting.
- The source says:
Between 2000 and 2002 Aghakhani studied conducting at the University of Music in Vienna with Erwin Acel, Leopold Hager and Yuji Yuasa, and choral conducting with Howard Arman.
- The article says:
Between 2000 and 2002 Aghakhani studied conducting at the University of Music in Vienna with Erwin Acel, Howard Arman, Leopold Hager, and Yuji Yuasa.
- To make it easier to see the issue, I have bolded the words that are exactly copied in that sentence. Rearranging the names at the end of the sentence is a start to putting content in your own words, but as you can see the bulk of that sentence is taken directly from your source.
- English is a word rich language, and there are many ways to communicate the same ideas. The best way is not to try to rewrite sentence by sentence, but rather to assimilate the information in your source and produce it with new language and structure. For instance, I see that the overall focus you have in that paragraph is education. I might say something like this:
Aghakhani's study of piano began with private lessons at the age of seven. At twelve, she began taking lessons in classical piano at the Vienna Conservatory. She studied conducting from 2000 to 2002 at the University of Music in Vienna and continued at the Sibelius Academy, earning her Master's degree in 2008.
- Of course, you can approach that differently, focusing on different aspects. What matters is that we are extracting the information and doing something new with it. There's not much information on Wikipedia on the people she studied with, but we don't need to list them all - we link to her website for those who would like more in-depth information.
- What this article really needs to include is some information from sources that are not connected to the subject. It is policy on the English Wikipedia that content in articles needs to be sourced to reliable secondary sources. It looks to me like all three of the sources we are using were authored by the subject herself. We need more sources talking about her that are not directly connected to her professionally. --Moonriddengirl (talk) 15:25, 3 November 2013 (UTC)