Talk:Nathaniel P. Banks/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Peacemaker67 (talk · contribs) 10:30, 17 January 2017 (UTC)

I'll do this one. My knowledge of US politics and the ACW is a bit limited, but this looks to be in very good shape from the off. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 10:30, 17 January 2017 (UTC)

• I've done some minor c/e here and there, feel free to revert if I have changed meaning in any way.
• It isn't clear about what mill he worked at. It says he took a job in "the" mill, which seems to be a reference to the Boston Manufacturing Company, then says he worked for another company. Perhaps "a" mill would be better? Changed to "a mill job". Magic♪piano 20:16, 19 January 2017 (UTC)
• There is a little assumed knowledge here. Manifest Destiny and Know Nothing could do with a short sentence explaining what they were. The links do not suffice, IMO. Done. Magic♪piano 20:16, 19 January 2017 (UTC)
• suggest one of the leaders of the Know Nothing movement, if that is what is intended? Done Magic♪piano 20:16, 19 January 2017 (UTC)
• Gardner is mentioned as the "incumbent Henry Gardner", at this point, Gardner should suffice, per WP:SURNAME Done Magic♪piano 20:16, 19 January 2017 (UTC)
• Similarly, Judge Loring should just be Loring, and Governor Gardner should just be Gardner, later John Andrew should just be Andrew. Done Magic♪piano 20:16, 19 January 2017 (UTC)
• There is an example of Known Nothing rather than Know Nothing. Fixed Magic♪piano 20:16, 19 January 2017 (UTC)
• (The amendment was repealed in 1863.) should probably be in a note or plain text rather then parentheses. Done Magic♪piano 20:16, 19 January 2017 (UTC)

Done down to Civil War, will get on with that tomorrow. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 11:14, 17 January 2017 (UTC)

• Maj. Gen. should be properly linked first, with an abbreviation in parentheses, then Maj. Gen. thereafter. Done Magic♪piano 20:16, 19 January 2017 (UTC)
• suggest First Battle of Kernstown on March 23, similarly Battle of Front Royal on May 23. and Battle of Cedar Mountain on August 9 Done Magic♪piano 20:16, 19 January 2017 (UTC)
• suggest to prevent Jacksonhim Done Magic♪piano 20:16, 19 January 2017 (UTC)
• suggest Banks was criticized for mishandling his troops and performing inadequate reconnaissance in the campaign Done Magic♪piano 20:16, 19 January 2017 (UTC)
• link Flanking maneuver Done Magic♪piano 20:16, 19 January 2017 (UTC)
• the combination of quotes in the couple of sentences beginning "Welles's opinion of the military abilities..." needs some attention. Edited. Less quotation, more straightforward. Magic♪piano 19:38, 23 January 2017 (UTC)

Down to the Siege of Port Hudson. More later. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 11:44, 17 January 2017 (UTC)

• ascending a river seems incongruous. Perhaps "advance up" instead? Fixed Magic♪piano 22:34, 22 January 2017 (UTC)
• I'd suggest leaving out the parentheses after Battle of Galveston, and just say "on January 1, 1863." Done Magic♪piano 22:34, 22 January 2017 (UTC)
• suggest Halleck also encouraged Banks to undertake the Red River Campaign Done Magic♪piano 22:34, 22 January 2017 (UTC)
• Second mention of David Porter should just be Porter Done Magic♪piano 22:34, 22 January 2017 (UTC)
• should "blacks" be African Americans? Done Magic♪piano 22:34, 22 January 2017 (UTC)
• if radicals is being used as a title here and there, perhaps it should have an initial capital? eg dominated by Radicals
  • I've updated references to "radical" that post-date the beginning of the war that seem relevant to this question. Magic♪piano 22:34, 22 January 2017 (UTC)
• The flaw of poor reconnaissance appears to be a pattern in his military endeavours, I wonder if it might be included in the lead? Done Magic♪piano 22:34, 22 January 2017 (UTC)
• Images
  • File:Nathaniel Prentice Banks.jpg PD-Brady-Handy licensing is OK
  • File:Nathaniel Prentice Banks - Southworth and Hawes.jpg was taken in 1852, but I understand that it needs to have been published before 1923 to use that licence, and it wasn't donated until 1943 (at which point is was probably technically published by being made available for display outside family and friends, if it hadn't been before that), so may not have been effectively published until 1943.
    • I've updated the license information on this file to encapsulate its publication ambiguity Magic♪piano 22:34, 22 January 2017 (UTC)
  • File:John Albion Andrew by Darius Cobb.jpg pre-1923 licensing is ok, as Cobb published it by giving it to Harvard in 1898.
  • File:Currier & Ives - The champions of the Union 1861.jpg licensing is ok according to the Library of Congress.
  • File:GenNPBanks.jpg should probably be PD-Brady-Handy Done Magic♪piano 22:34, 22 January 2017 (UTC)
  • File:Siege of Port Hudson.jpg, File:Richard Taylor.jpg, File:Edward Canby.png, File:Nathaniel Prentice Banks - Brady-Handy.jpg - licensing is OK
  • File:Nathaniel Prentice Banks statue, Waltham, MA - 2.JPG is also ok, as it was installed before 1923.
  • I don't think you need to state (in the captions) who the work was by, but that is a personal preference, no action needed.
• The article prose (except regarding the above comments) is very good, the MOS has been followed, the sources appear reliable and the article is well cited, the article is stable, and has no apparent plagiarism concerns or original research. Once the above points have been addressed, this article should easily pass. Placing on hold for seven days for the above points to be addressed. Regards, Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 02:38, 18 January 2017 (UTC)

Thank you for taking the time to review this. I will get to work on addressing your issues. Magic♪piano 16:26, 18 January 2017 (UTC)

I think I've addressed your issues -- let me know if I missed anything! Magic♪piano 19:38, 23 January 2017 (UTC)

All done. Great work, by the way. I reckon this is very close to FA if you want to take it that far. Passing. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 22:26, 23 January 2017 (UTC)