Talk:Nasr of Granada/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Iazyges (talk · contribs) 15:10, 2 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Will start soon. Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 15:10, 2 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Criteria

GA Criteria

GA Criteria:

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1.a Y

1.b Y
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2.a Y

2.b Y

2.c Y

2.d Y
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3.b Y
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6.b Y

No DAB links Y
No dead links Y
No missing citations Y

Discussion

Prose Suggestions

Please note that almost all of these are suggestions, and can be implemented or ignored at your discretion. Any changes I deem necessary for the article to pass GA standards I will bold.

Lede

was a son of Muhammed II al-Faqih suggest changing a to the
- Done. A query: Isn't "a son" appropriate if he is only one of multiple sons? HaEr48 (talk) 15:00, 7 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
At his accession, suggest At time of his accession,
- Done. HaEr48 (talk) 15:00, 7 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
In the first year of his rule he made peace with the three enemies although he had to yield territories. In addition to Ceuta which was captured during the war, he yielded Algeciras and Ronda to the Marinids in exchange for peace in September 1309. suggest He made peace with the Maranids in his first year, in September 1309, ceding the African port of Ceuta, which had already been captured, as well as Algeciras and Ronda in Europe, to them.
- Done (with some adjustment) HaEr48 (talk) 15:00, 7 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Granada defeated the Aragonese siege of Almeria (August–December 1309) and James II of Aragon sued for peace and left Granadan territories. suggest James II of Aragon sued for peace after Nasr defeated the Aragonese siege of Almeria in December 1309, withdrawing his forces from Granada by January 1310.
- Done (with some adjustment) HaEr48 (talk) 15:00, 7 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
, who was Nasr's nephew and second cousin. suggest deleting this as superfluous.
- Done HaEr48 (talk) 15:00, 7 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Origin and early life

His mother was Shams al-Duha, Muhammad's second wife, who was a Christian and a former slave. suggest His mother was Shams al-Duha, the second wife of Muhammad, a Christian and former slave.
Done. HaEr48 (talk) 02:52, 13 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
as well as the North African-based Marinid Sultanate suggest as well as the Marinid Sultanate in North Africa
Done. HaEr48 (talk) 02:52, 13 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

War against the triple alliance

Isolated without allies and at war against three larger enemies, Granada was in a very dangerous situation when Nasr took power suggest Granada was in a very dangerous situation when Nasr took power, at war with three larger enemies and without allies.
Done. HaEr48 (talk) 23:34, 13 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
and subsequently conquered by Granada in 1306. suggest and was subsequently conquered by Granada in 1306.
but the port would be sacked and Aragon would receive all movable goods. suggest but the port would first be sacked and all moveable goods would be given to Aragon.
Done. HaEr48 (talk) 23:34, 13 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Two siege engines attacked its walls suggest Two siege engines attacked the walls of Gibraltar
Done. HaEr48 (talk) 23:34, 13 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
The city managed to stockpile supplies and improved its defenses thanks to the late arrival of the Aragonese forces, suggest The city was able to stockpile supplies and improve its defenses due to the late arrival of the Aragonese forces,
Done. HaEr48 (talk) 23:34, 13 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Nasr agreed to pay to Castile as well as an indemnity of 150,000 gold doblas, as well as an annual tribute of 11,000 doblas. suggest Nasr agreed to pay an indemnity of 150,000 gold doblas, as well as an annual tribute of 11,000 doblas, to Castile.
Done. HaEr48 (talk) 23:34, 13 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Rebellion and downfall

His vizier, Muhammad ibn al-Hajj, suggest removing His vizier
Done. HaEr48 (talk) 23:40, 13 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
they both liked to dress in the Castilian manner suggest they both often dressed in the Castilian manner
Done. HaEr48 (talk) 23:40, 13 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
multiple reports of when this happened suggest changing multiple to conflicting
Done. HaEr48 (talk) 23:40, 13 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Attempt to regain the throne

in which a Granadan force led by Ismail confronted suggest where a Granadan army led by Ismail battled
Done, except I used "when" instead of where. HaEr48 (talk) 23:40, 13 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
@HaEr48: That is all my suggestions, passing now. Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 17:10, 13 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Thank you for your review and your thoughtful suggestions. I've addressed all. HaEr48 (talk) 23:40, 13 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]