Talk:Nasib al-Bakri/GA1

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Reviewer: Wizardman (talk · contribs) 00:20, 7 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Haven't forgotten about this. Did read lead and early life so far and saw no issues, I'll read the rest ideally tomorrow. Wizardman 02:41, 11 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Here's what I found:

"It was at the al-Bakri family home where Nasib invited Faisal to join al-Fatat, which he reportedly agreed to." when was this? adding a date for context would be helpful since it's starting off the section.
"During this period and until 1920," rm and, flows better without it.
"His younger brother As'ad was killed in action in 1926" I feel like this would fit better somewhere in the earlier section, rather than in the post-revolt one.

Only found a couple minor issues. I'll put this on hold and will pass when fixed. Wizardman 18:21, 11 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@Wizardman: Thanks for the review, I've addressed the issues you brought up. Let me know if there's anything else that should be revised. Cheers --Al Ameer (talk) 19:28, 11 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Did another run-through and everything looks good, so I'll pass the article. Wizardman 22:10, 11 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]