Talk:Narinder Kumar Mehra/GA1
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Reviewer: Mike Christie (talk · contribs) 11:50, 25 January 2018 (UTC)
I'll review this. Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 11:50, 25 January 2018 (UTC)
- Thanks mate --jojo@nthony (talk) 12:32, 25 January 2018 (UTC)
- Three external links are dead: see here.
- Done Two dead links removed, one replaced, additional citation provided--jojo@nthony (talk) 10:08, 26 January 2018 (UTC)
- It's best to introduce acronyms such as AIIMS before you used them; ideally ICMR too. Conversely, you don't need to introduce "MSc" as an abbreviation, because you don't use it in the rest of the article.
- In the biography section I would suggest moving the mention of his professorship in 1993 to later in the article to keep things in chronological order.
At the time of his retirement from service in 2004, he was serving as the Dean of Research and post-retirement
: what does "and post-retirement" mean?
- Done Copy edited. It was an error on my part while removing the word superannuation.--jojo@nthony (talk) 10:17, 26 January 2018 (UTC)
As of now
: use "As of" whatever the latest source year for this is instead.
- Done Corrected --jojo@nthony (talk) 10:18, 26 January 2018 (UTC)
His research has been documented by way of several articles; ResearchGate an online repository of scientific articles has listed 287 of them.
I'd cut all of this. Of course his research has been documented; he's a scientist. And the number of articles listed on ResearchGate isn't that interesting a fact.
- Done I have reworded the sentence. ResearchGate reference will help easy navigation to Mehra's articles.--jojo@nthony (talk) 10:23, 26 January 2018 (UTC)
- What's the basis for saying he's widely cited? There are citation metrics; is that what you're using?
- ResearchGate reference in the previous sentence shows his citations, I was just providing a few direct examples.--jojo@nthony (talk) 10:30, 26 January 2018 (UTC)
- The page numbers in some of your footnotes are odd-looking: "pp. 228-" for example. If it's a range you need the last page number; if not, get rid of the en dash and make it "p." instead of "pp.".
- Done That's an error {T} Wikipedia citation tool for Google Books makes. I have corrected the error.--jojo@nthony (talk) 10:28, 26 January 2018 (UTC)
Advanced Course on Basic and Translational Immunology of conducted by FIMSA
: looks like a missing word?
- Done copy edited--jojo@nthony (talk) 10:33, 26 January 2018 (UTC)
He...was a faculty of the 2016 edition of ISHICON
: no, he wasn't! Not sure what you did mean to say.
- The inline citation clearly mentions him as one of the faculty. The webpage has a section FACULTY ISHICON 2016 and his profile is given there. --jojo@nthony (talk) 10:37, 26 January 2018 (UTC)
He has been associated with journals such as Microbes and Infection of Pasteur Institute, Paris, International journal of Human Genetics and Journal of Clinical Immunology of Springer
: a bit vague; what does it mean to be associated with a journal?
- Done copy edited and clarified --jojo@nthony (talk) 10:42, 26 January 2018 (UTC)
-- That's it for a first pass. Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 03:45, 26 January 2018 (UTC)
All looks good now. I added the ResearchGate reference to the statement that he is widely cited; and I made it "a member of the faculty" for the reference to the 2016 ISHICON -- perhaps Indian English is different, but in British English and American English "he was a faculty" would mean he was several people. Everything else is fixed, so passing GA. Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 11:06, 26 January 2018 (UTC)
- Thanks mate --jojo@nthony (talk) 11:19, 26 January 2018 (UTC)