Talk:Naide Gomes/GA1

GA Review

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Nominator: Yue (talk · contribs) 09:28, 25 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: Editør (talk · contribs) 02:53, 8 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]

I have started the review and plan to add more comments later. – Editør (talk) 02:53, 8 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]

I have added a couple more comments and I think this is enough for a first round of comments. I suggest that you first look at these things and because the article may undergo major changes that I will have another look after that for a second round if that is alright with you. – Editør (talk) 15:33, 8 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]

@Editør: Howdy! Thanks for the review so far. I'll take a good look at your suggestions and comments late this week after I get home. I'll ping you again after some of those "major changes" are done; I hope you don't mind if this review and refine process takes a bit longer than the usual 7 days. If you do mind, of course let me know. Cheers. Yue🌙 14:57, 10 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]

I would like to try and finish this round of comments coming weekend and the entire review before the end of the month. Do you think that is feasible? – Editør (talk) 21:04, 17 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

Post-nominal letters should not be used in the lead per MOS:POSTNOM
"who competed primarily in long jump" doesn't seem to match with her setting national records in several other events
"and began formally practising athletics when she was 13" maybe remove this phrase from the lead, because she quickly stopped and resumed a year later
"Prior to changing her nationality," can be removed and a new paragraph could be started here instead
Maybe some specific times and point totals can be mentioned for her current or former records?
Maybe some her most important medals can be mentioned?
Is Naide a common short form of Enezaide? If not, it should be mentioned in the first sentence per MOS:NICKNAME. – Editør (talk) 11:17, 15 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Her full name "Enezaide do Rosário da Vera Cruz Gomes" seems to contain three family names, but the hatnote only mentions two. If she has indeed three family names, could this be clarified in the hatnote? – Editør (talk) 11:17, 15 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox

"Athletics, in Berlin" no comma needed here.
It would perhaps make more sense to swap the two photos in this article, the jump photo to go with the career section and the photo where you can clearly see her face in the infobox.
"Nationality: Portugal" I think this should be 'Portuguese'.
Shouldn't her nationality from before 2001 be added as well?
The medal record is not very long and isn't in the way of images in the article, so I think it can be shown by default.
Where available event articles can be linked, such as 2006 IAAF World Indoor Championships – Women's long jump.
An alt text for the image should be added per MOS:ALT.

Early life and education

Is "São Tomé and Príncipe" the most precise birth place that could be given?
"her grandfather was from Portugal" is this connected to her adapting to life in Lisbon? Maybe this could be explained.
"by that time she 'was among the best heptathletes and high jumpers in Portugal', and had begun to seriously consider becoming a Portuguese citizen." are her performance and citizenship related? If so this should be explained.
Does this section contain enough information about her education to merit the word in the section heading? It is more about when she started with athletics.
"formally practising athletics" I'm not sure 'formal' is the right term here. Do you mean she joined an athletics club?

Career

Could this section be divided into meaningful subsections?
Is there a selection criterion for what competitions are discussed? For instance, for the year 2010, there are two major championships mentioned, but nothing else.
"After a lengthy naturalisation process" the word 'lengthy' should be quantified or it should be rephrased.
"She earned her first gold medal" first ever, first international, or first global gold medal?
Did she stop competing in the combined events after 2005?
An alt text for the image should be added per MOS:ALT.
There is little information about her career between 2011 and her retirement in 2015. Did she compete at all?
Is there any information about the last 10 years of her life and career after her retirement from competitive athletics?
Does she have a legacy in her birth or adopted country? Did she inspire anyone?

International results

The table should have a caption, row headers, and row scopes per MOS:DTAB.
Abbreviations like h and q should be explained with {{AthAbbr}}.
The Notes column should be called Results.
An additional Notes column would be interesting to indicate which results were national records.
The results are linked to the event articles, so it would make more sense to move these links from the Result to the Event column.
Countries don't need to be linked.
Maybe tables or lists with her national titles and circuit wins could be added as well? If so, these and 'International results' can be subsections of 'Competition results'.
The section doesn't reference any sources. Most information can probably be covered by referencing her World Athletics profile page, but for some details such as placings and records additional sources may be needed.
The table should probably be split into two per MOS:COLHEAD. – Editør (talk) 21:12, 17 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Records

I think a table or list with her personal bests would be informative here, including which were records and if/when they were broken.
Here or in the Career section, perhaps a table showing her progression in the long jump would be interesting as well.

Honours

The post-nominal letters could be mentioned here.
Is this the only honour or non-medal award she received during her career? If so, one sentence is a bit short for a section, perhaps it could be integrated into the career section.

External links

You may want to consider using {{Sport links}} to automatically add additional links.
"Women's Long Jump – Season's Best" only needs a capital at the start.
All flags could be omitted, although MOS:FLAGS doesn't strictly forbid them.
Categories may be alphabetized for easier navigation.