Talk:Nabonidus/GA1

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Reviewer: Iazyges (talk · contribs) 11:33, 26 August 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Criteria

GA Criteria

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No DAB links Y
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No missing citations Y

Discussion

Prose Suggestions

Please note that almost all of these are suggestions, and can be implemented or ignored at your discretion. Any changes I deem necessary for the article to pass GA standards I will bold.

Lede

to 543 or 542 BC, think the slash may work better here, suggest to 543/542 BC,

Yeah, changed. Ichthyovenator (talk) 22:39, 30 August 2021 (UTC)[reply]

I linked Arabia to Arabian Peninsula here and in the body, if there isn't supposed to be a link for some reason, feel free to revert as always.

Should have been linked already so this is fine. Ichthyovenator (talk) 22:39, 30 August 2021 (UTC)[reply]

At this time, Belshazzar acted as regent in Babylonia, though Nabonidus continued to be recognised as the king. suggest During this period, Belshazzar acted as regent in Babylonia, while Nabonidus continued to be recognised as the king. (typing recognized as "recognised" for your usage hurt me a little bit, I won't lie.)

Changed. Does me not even being British relieve or increase the pain? :) Ichthyovenator (talk) 22:39, 30 August 2021 (UTC)[reply]

the temple dedicated to Sîn in the city of Harran suggest the temple dedicated to Sîn in the major city of Harran.

Added "major". Ichthyovenator (talk) 22:39, 30 August 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Whereas Belshazzar is assumed to have been killed, several sources point towards Nabonidus being captured and spared, perhaps being allowed to retire to the region of Carmania by Cyrus. suggest Several sources state that Nabonidus was captured and spared, possibly allowed to the region of Carmania; however, Belshazzar is believed to have been killed.

Changed. Ichthyovenator (talk) 22:39, 30 August 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Ancestry and connection to royalty

claiming that she had influence with the kings Nabopolassar suggest changing had to wielded

Changed. Ichthyovenator (talk) 22:39, 30 August 2021 (UTC)[reply]

city Harran in suggest major city Harran in

Changed. Ichthyovenator (talk) 22:39, 30 August 2021 (UTC)[reply]

it is possible that Adagoppe was Aramean suggest Adagoppe may have been Aramean

Changed. Ichthyovenator (talk) 22:39, 30 August 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Pre-royal career

as he in his royal inscriptions referred to his father as a prince suggest as he refers to his father as a prince in his royal inscriptions.

Changed. Ichthyovenator (talk) 18:29, 1 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Rise to the throne

Though Labashi-Marduk being the grandson of Nebuchadnezzar II through his mother would have made him part of the royal bloodline, it is also possible that he was the son of Neriglissar and another of his wives suggest Though Labashi-Marduk may have been the grandson of Nebuchadnezzar II through his mother, making him part of the royal bloodline, it is also possible he was the son of Neriglissar and a different wife.

Changed. Ichthyovenator (talk) 18:29, 1 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

at Uruk up until at least 19 June, and at Sippar suggest Uruk up until at least 19 June, and in the city of Sippar until at least 20 June

Changed. Ichthyovenator (talk) 18:29, 1 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

assuming the throne himself but was put up to it by the other conspirators. suggest assuming the throne himself but was convinced to by the other conspirators.

Changed. Ichthyovenator (talk) 18:29, 1 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Early reign

restoring some offerings suggest restored some offerings
his goal since his accession year suggest his goal since he assumed the throne

Nabonidus in Tayma

Nabonidus departed to campaign in Arabia, apparently initially aimed at suppressing a rebellion in the Anti-Lebanon Mountains suggest Nabonidus departed to campaign in Arabia, initially to suppress a rebellion in the Anti-Lebanon Mountains
growing imperialism of Babylonia in the west suggest changing imperialism to expansionism; more period accurate.
It is possible that the point of going to Tayma in the first place was to control these important trade routes that ran through the city suggest It is possible that the intention of conquering Tayma was to control these important trade routes that ran through the city.
would have been an insane strategy unless this is a direct quote from someone (if so please quote them), suggest changing insane to unlikely.

Religious policies

not the same temple as the temple of the same name at Sippar suggest not the same temple as the one of the same name at Sippar

Late reign and fall of Babylon

Perhaps the authorities at Sippar were disgruntled with Nabonidus's religious policies or perhaps the Babylonian defeat at Opis had been so severe that further resistance was pointless suggest It is possible the authorities at Sippar were disgruntled with Nabonidus's religious policies or else viewed the Babylionina defeat at Opis as so decisive that further resistance was pointless.

Family, children and descendants

Possibly another daughter recorded in archival texts at Sippar. Name unknown suggest Possibly another daughter recorded in archival texts at Sippar, however, her name is unknown

Character and remembrance

the Achaemenid Empire that succeeded the reign of Nabonidus in Babylonia viewed his rule as an example that should never be repeated again suggest changing repeated again with emulated
As such, it is clear that opinions of Nabonidus were not completely negative. suggest changing opinions to contemporary views
That is all my suggestions, passing now. Apologies for taking so long. Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 19:03, 1 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

I've implemented all your suggestions. Thank you very much for reviewing this article and the others! Ichthyovenator (talk) 20:46, 1 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]