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Reviewer: Spinningspark (talk · contribs) 17:49, 29 November 2014 (UTC)[reply]


It's not often that I come across a GA submission that has very little that needs fixing, but this is one of them, so well done on that score. The only GA issue I have is that the lead is a little short. Perhaps we could have something on the intended business model in the lead. Also, although the lead says there was mixed reception, it lacks any sense of the nature of the comments. What I got from the comments was quality of simulation, good thing, sexual stereotyping, bad thing. One or two sentences would be enough to put that in the lead.

The only other comment I would like to make is that there is a lot of over-referencing in places. Do we really need five references for the name of the voice-over actress for instance? However, this is not a GA issue so you can ignore that if you like. SpinningSpark 13:19, 30 November 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Sorry for the late reply. Yeah good point about the over-referencing - I trimmed that down. I also expanded the lead. All good now? :) Freikorp (talk) 09:30, 3 December 2014 (UTC)[reply]
That's fine and it's now promoted. It's a little unusual to have only one paragraph in the lead and it could possibly be broken into two, but the article is quite short so it's probably ok. At one time WP:LEAD required the lead to be exactly four paragraphs but is now something less prescriptive. SpinningSpark 10:04, 3 December 2014 (UTC)[reply]
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