Talk:My Truth/GA1

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 07:34, 8 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Comments a really good piece of work this.

Five sentences starting "Robyn co-wrote all fourteen songs ..." are quite "factoid", they don't flow so well, any chance you could consider merging a couple of them to enhanace the readability?

I can only count two of those sentences! Re-wrote the one in "Background", don't know if it is better or not. Pancake (talk) 10:08, 15 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Same comment applies to the Composition section, e.g. "David Schmader of The Stranger opined that it features a directness that is "unprecedented in pop".[13] Schmader compared its piano..." could easily become "David Schmader of The Stranger opined that it features a directness that is "unprecedented in pop",[13] and compared its piano..." Done
"sixth months " six months. Done
""Electric" was released as My Truth‍‍ '‍s lead single on 29 April 1999.[20] The CD single included both the radio edit and the extended album version.[21] The single became Robyn's third top-ten entry on the Sverigetopplistan singles chart,..." "single" used four times in quick succession, consider a reword or merger to reduce the repetitiveness. Done
""Play" managed to peak at" -> ""Play" peaked at..." Done
Should Joyzine be italicised?

Don't think so, just a website not a magazine. Pancake (talk) 10:08, 15 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]

"brilliant " is this a quote? If not it's a little POV, if so please "quote" it.

The writer used the word lysande, a synonym to the Swedish word briljant, which means, obviously, "brilliant". It's quoted now. Pancake (talk) 10:08, 15 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]

"Lucas did review the album on behalf of AllMusic.[8] Lucas wrote" either "He wrote..." or merge, "Lucas did review the album on behalf of AllMusic,[8] writing..." Done
"Swedish Recording Industry Association (GLF) for sales of 40,000" you've already abbreviated the GLF, so just use the abbreviation rather than explaining it again. Done
Any reason to make the "Certifications" table sortable when it contains precisely one entry?

I used the Certification Table templates, is it possible to make them unsortable? Pancake (talk) 10:08, 15 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]

As I said, excellent stuff, I'll put it on hold while these minor issues are looked into. The Rambling Man (talk) 06:31, 9 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for your review and your kind words! I will begin dealing with these issues in a day or two. Pretty busy at the moment! Pancake (talk) 16:04, 11 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Good work, sorry it's taken a while to get back to you. I'm happy to pass this as a Good Article. The Rambling Man (talk) 06:50, 28 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]