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Reviewer: Numerounovedant (talk · contribs) 18:04, 18 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]


I'll put up the comments shortly! NumerounovedantTalk 18:04, 18 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Lead
  • At the time of its initial broadcast, the episode was watched by ... people/ In its initial airing
  • "My Big Fat Greek Rush Week" featured - "The episode featired"
Plot
  • The opening sentence seems odd "talks about her rape"?
  • "heard Parker having sex, and Parker blames her." - blames her for what? having sex?her rape? it is awkwardly written
  • "Keith (Enrico Colantoni) hikes through the desert." - How does that fit in here?
  • "Wallace’s (Percy Daggs III) and Logan's (Jason Dohring) sociology professor recruits volunteers for a Stanford prison experiment-like study."
"Cormac (Jason Beghe) starts following Keith." - I am really lost here. How does any of that make sense?

The same problem continues throughout the section. Too many short sentences that barely connect to each other. I suggest you re-structure the whole thing, because honestly in its current state none of it seems to be making any sense. NumerounovedantTalk 19:21, 24 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

The section is much more comprehensive now. Still some minor blips: Towards the end seperate the conclusion with some the like "The episode ends with..." and who's Mac? NumerounovedantTalk 17:16, 26 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Production
  • "Levine had previously worked with star Chris Lowell on the recently cancelled Life as We Know It" - recently? it's awkwardly written plus recently further complicates the sentence. Recent to the episode airing? or now?
Ratings
  • Same as Lead
Is there nothing more to the section? Maybe if you add the viewrship rankings and/or Nielsen Ratings it becomes more comprehensive. You may also compare the ratings to that of the previous episode and show the trend in viewrship throught that. NumerounovedantTalk 17:16, 26 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Reception
  • Will add comments shortly.
"indicating that it was "great""- does the score indicates that it was great?(if so remove the quotes) or did he say so?(if so rephrase)
References
Publishers missing in refs 3, 6 & 10
These minor issues are sometimes overlooked! That's perfectly fine. NumerounovedantTalk 06:47, 28 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

NumerounovedantTalk 13:24, 19 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Final Comments
@Johanna: All my queries were addressed. Well done! NumerounovedantTalk 06:47, 28 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]
GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects): b (focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:
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