Talk:Mutual Core/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: 11JORN (talk · contribs) 01:08, 3 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Hello! I will review soon. Jorn ^talk 01:08, 3 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Please choose American or British English.
- Can you please explain me what to change on the article? English is not my first language, and i'm still not good enough to distinguish between them.
  - For example, "3 December 2012" is British English, and "December 3, 2012" is American. And on the article you are using both, please choose only one.
The song was well received by contemporary music critics → Link music critics
- Done
In an interview published on Fréttablaðið the singer stated → Put a comma after "Fréttablaðið"
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The project, called Biophilia comprises → The same as above for "Biophilia"
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and to be including a series of workshops for children[8] in collaboration with local schools. → Put the ref at the end of the phrase.
- Done
"Mutual Core" has a subtitle, announced live at the Manchester International Festival performances, which is "Tectonic plates, chords". The subtitle refers to the physical phenomena related to the song and to musical resources also related to this physical phenomena. Moreover, every song on Biophilia has a characteristic color, featured on the album artwork and in the apps, and every tuning fork contained in the Ultimate Art Edition is also painted in the colour of the track. The color of "Mutual Core" is brown. → Where is the reference?
Other 2 remixes of "Crystalline" and "Sacrifice" → I think "Other two remixes" sounds better.
- Done

This is it for now. I'll continue tomorrow :) Jorn ^talk 15:57, 4 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]

BBC Music is not a printed publication. Remove the italics.
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Sound designer David Paterson described the way Björk wanted the music on "Mutual Core" : "Bjork [...]" → Remove the space before the colon.
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Link music critics
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According to Mark Pytlik of Pitchfork → It is not a printed publication
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Same for Popmatters.
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"Mutual Core" was described as "best" and "climactic" by Helen Brown of Telegraph.co.uk → "Mutual Core" was described as "best" and "climactic" by Helen Brown of The Daily Telegraph
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"literally volcanic" by Heather Phares of AllMusic → "literally volcanic" by Heather Phares of Allmusic and it is not a printed publication
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Consequence of Sound is not a printed publication
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Andy Gill of The Independent gave a negative review of the album, praising only the choral elements, stating that: "they’re a constant delight as she reflects upon her desire for the "dangerous gifts" of elemental nature, the lightning-flash of creative inspiration ("Thunderbolt") ; muses about being a bead threaded upon a DNA chain ("Hollow") ; explores the ethically neutral, natural attraction of parasite to host ("Virus") ; admires the creative force of volcanic energy ("Mutual Core")".[35] → Remove all spaces before these semicolons.
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wearing a golden dress (by Michael van der Ham)[44], → put the comma before the ref
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What Matters, Myspace, The Verge, Flavorwire, CraveOnline, io9 and Ology are not printed publications. Remove the italics of them
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while Gary Pini of Papermag → The correct is Paper
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Björk premiered Biophilia's songs → Itaclize Biophilia
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During the "Mutual Core" performance the screen projected images of moving tectonic plates → Put a comma after "performance"
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"Wearsthetrousers.com" sounds bad in this case. Try working in using "The website Wearsthetrousers" without italic.
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Put quotation marks in the word "Jóga" as it is a song.
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PembrokeMayball.com do the same thing I suggested for "Wearsthetrousers"
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The "Versions" section is unreferenced. I'd remove it.
- I changed to Track listing and added further references

I'll review the references before I put it on hold. Jorn ^talk 23:56, 5 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]

FN2 Rolling Stone is not linked and add the publisher, Jann Wenner.
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FN3 Pitchfork is not linked and remove italics of it, and add the publisher, Ryan Schreiber.
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FN5 The correct is Dazed & Confused and is missing the publisher, Waddell Limited.
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FN6 Missing the publisher.
FN7 Link NME and the publisher is IPC Media
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FN8 Remove the italics.
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FN11 Link The Wall Street Journal and add the publisher Dow Jones & Company
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FN12 Missing the publisher
FN13 Missing a publisher
FN14 Missing a publisher
FN15 Add the magazine Fact and the publisher The Vinyl Factory.
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FN16 Remove the italics of bjork.com
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FN17 Add the publisher Noise Made Me Do It without italics
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FN18 Remove the italics of Beatport
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FN19 Add the publisher for Pitchfork Media and remove italics
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FN20 Change to Capital FM and add the publisher Global Radio
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FN21 Remove the italics of PopMatters
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FN22 Link Daily Mirror and add the publisher Trinity Mirror
FN23 Remove the italics of Wearsthetrousers.com
FN24 Change to BBC Music and the publisher is British Broadcasting Company
FN25 Change to The Daily Telegraph and the publisher is Telegraph Media Group
FN26 Add the publisher Waddell Limited
FN27 Add the publisher IPC Media
FN28 Link Télérama and the publisher Le Monde S.A
FN29 Change to Clash
FN30 Link The Guardian and the publisher is Guardian Media Group
FN31 Remove the italics
FN32 Link The Phoenix and the publisher is Phoenix Media/Communications Group
FN33 Link Los Angeles Times and the publisher is Tribune Company
FN34 The correct is The Independent and the publisher is Independent Print Limited
FN35 Missing the publisher
FN36 Missing a publisher
FN37 Remove the italics
FN38 Missing the publisher
FN39 Missing the publisher
FN40 Link The Huffington Post and the publisher is AOL
FN41 The correct is Paper and add the publisher
FN42 Missing a publisher
FN43 Remove the italics and link Style.com and add the publisher Fairchild Fashion Group
FN44 Link Scientific American and add the publisher Nature Publishing Group
FN45 Missing a publisher
FN46 Missing a publisher
FN47 Remove the italics
FN48 Link
FN49 Link
FN50 Add the publisher AOL
FN51 Remove the italics
FN52 Remove the italics
FN53 Add the publisher
FN54 Remove the italics
FN55 Link and remove the italics
FN56 Link Spin and add the publisher Buzz Media
FN57 Link and remove the italics and add the publisher Gawker Media
FN58 Link and remove the italics
FN59 Link The Atlantic and add the publisher Atlantic Media Company
FN60 Add a publisher
FN61 Add a publisher
FN62 Remove the italics
FN63 Change to Pitchfork Media and add the publisher
FN64 Add the publisher
FN65 Remove the italics
FN66 Remove the italics
FN67 Remove the italics and link Digital Spy, and add the publisher Hearst Corporation
FN68 Add the publisher
FN69 Add the publisher Spin Music Group
FN70 The correct is The Times and add the publisher News Corporation
FN71 Remove the italics
FN72 Link the publishers
FN73, 74, 75 Remove the italics

On hold. Wow, more than 70 references to fix, a lot to do. If you have any doubt, just call me at my talk page. Jorn ^talk 01:26, 10 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]

All Done

It's been over three weeks since the nomination was put on hold, and I don't see any activity on the article or here. Perhaps the review should be closed soon? BlueMoonset (talk) 23:31, 1 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]
- I have only recently seen this and have undertaken some of these tasks myself. I will do some more when I have time. FM [ talk to me | show contributions ] 15:37, 2 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]

All refs were corrected by myself so I finally can pass. Jorn ^talk 21:16, 12 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]

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