Talk:Music of the Spheres World Tour/GA1

GA Review

Passed. — VAUGHAN J. (TALK) 13:45, 21 June 2023 (UTC)[reply]

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Reviewer: Vaughan J. (talk · contribs) 08:27, 21 June 2023 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

It is reasonably well written.
a. (prose, spelling, and grammar):

b. (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a. (reference section):

b. (citations to reliable sources):

c. (OR):

d. (copyvio and plagiarism):
It is broad in its coverage.
a. (major aspects):

b. (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):

b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/fail:

(Criteria marked are unassessed)

Calling dibs on this, but I'm starting this today! — VAUGHAN J. (TALK) 08:27, 21 June 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox and lead

Infobox looks good.
Add a comma after concert tour Done
Add the release year of Music of the Spheres
Add a comma after 50% Done
"concert run features extensive use" → "concert features an extensive use" Done
Add a comma after wristbands Done
Move ref 2 to where some of the sections where the wristband switch is mentioned in this article. Done
"Coldplay also partnered" → "Coldplay has also partnered" Done

Development

Background

Remove the YouTube broadcast, as that hasn't been mentioned in ref 4. Partly done – was changed to source that mentions it was broadcasted to YouTube

Sustainability

Image looks good.
"to utilise Sustainable Aviation Fuel from" → "to utilise sustainable aviation fuel from" Done

Fans and accessibility

Good

Partnerships

"and provite help" → "and provide help" – Typo. Done

Opening acts

Image looks good.
"Catt), Dominican Republic (with" → "Catt), the Dominican Republic (with" Done

Concert synopsis

Good

Commercial performances

Ticket sales

Image looks good.
Everything else looks good.

Venue records

Good

Critical reception

North America

Un-italicise NJ.com. Done

Europe

Good

Rock in Rio

Image looks good.
Un-italicise UOL. Done

Latin America

Un-italicise Omelete. Done

Accolades

Good

Concert film

Original broadcast

Infobox looks good.
Un-italicise IndieWire. Done

Final version

Good

Legacy

Music industry response

Good

Reduced emissions

Un-italicise BBC News. Done

Cultural impact

Good

Economic influence

Good

Philanthropy

Good

Set list

Good

Tour dates

Good

Cancelled dates

Good

Personnel

Good

Gear

Good

Notes

Good

References

Copyvio score – It looks pretty decent with 34.2%.
The reference list looks good.

External links

Good

Final comments and verdict

On hold until all of these issues are fixed; only just some minor changes, but good job on the article! — VAUGHAN J. (TALK) 08:45, 21 June 2023 (UTC)[reply]
Hello! I apologize for the grammar mistakes. I'm from Brazil, so English is not my first language! There were only two things from your notes that I haven't corrected yet: The wristband replacement (on it right now) and Music of the Spheres' release year. The tour was announced a day before the album came out, so I felt like it would look redundant. GustavoCza (talk • contribs) 11:41, 21 June 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Wristband switch corrected! Considering what I said in my first comment, is the album release year really necessary? GustavoCza (talk • contribs) 12:02, 21 June 2023 (UTC)[reply]
For the release year on the album, as you said, it depends on whether the tour was announced before the album came out the same year, so I'm actually gonna cross that out. — VAUGHAN J. (TALK) 12:40, 21 June 2023 (UTC)[reply]

By the way, I've also checked the remaining issues that have been done. — VAUGHAN J. (TALK) 12:40, 21 June 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Pass now; good job on making changes on the article! No issues are left! — VAUGHAN J. (TALK) 13:45, 21 June 2023 (UTC)[reply]

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.