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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 19:50, 21 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Will be reviewing this article as part of the GAN Backlog Drive of April to May 2020. MWright96 (talk) 19:50, 21 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects): b (focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:

Background history

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  • "David Stiffler (an architect) and Dean Junker (a mechanical engineer)" - reword this portion of text without using parentheses
 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:06, 22 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • "started a hobby in the 1970s of collecting and restoring antique musical instruments." - began a hobby of collecting and restoring antique musical instruments in the 1970s.
 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:06, 22 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • "as a venture for the collecting, restoring and displaying of antique musical instruments." - how about collection, restoration and display
 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:06, 22 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • "In 1979, they decided to create a formal display to show off their hobby to friends and others." - for friends and others to see their collection.
 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:06, 22 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • "in the summer of 1983." - try not to use seasons per MOS:SEASON
 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:28, 22 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • "in the fall of 1983." - same issue as above
 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:28, 22 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • "It eventually opened in May 1984 to the general public" - to the general public in May 1984 might be better
 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:28, 22 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Work was then started in remodeling the 12,000 square-foot" - use the convert template on the text in bold
 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:28, 22 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • "The granary originally was where the farm’s workers lived and slept. They called the granary the old farmhouse, from which the music museum received its "house" name." - think these two sentences can be made into one and shortened accordingly
 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:28, 22 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Current museum

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  • Theatre organ doesn't need to begin with a capital letter
 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:35, 22 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • "that is thirty feet wide and eighteen feet high." - use the convert template in the words in bold
 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:35, 22 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

References

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  • Reference 2 is missing the access date
 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:49, 22 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • Reference 5 (City-data.com) is a blacklisted source that should be replaced with another reliable source that cites the information it verifies
 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:49, 22 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Will put the review on hold to allow the nominator to address/query the points raised above. MWright96 (talk) 17:16, 22 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

@MWright96: All issues have been addressed. Can you take another look. Thanks. --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:49, 22 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
@Doug Coldwell: Now promoting to GA class. MWright96 (talk) 20:47, 22 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
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