Talk:Murders of Keona Holley and Justin Johnson/GA1

GA Review

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Nominator: Queen of Hearts (talk · contribs) 01:28, 23 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: PARAKANYAA (talk · contribs) 05:18, 23 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

First thoughts, will do deeper check later

relative to the size of the article I think the lead is slightly too long. some of the details contained in the lead are, imo, unnecessary for the lead and should only be in the body. maybe trim it to only the more pertinent details?
- tried to do this
one thing that should be in the lead is, imo, stuff about the response to it beyond just proceedings, since the response to a murder is usually one of the things that make it notable and a key part of the event
- the body doesn't really have that much response, just "some ppl held a vigil" and "some politicians 'cared'". I've added those to the lead, but I suspect there's more to be added to the body here (which I will try to do later)
date is wrong on cite 16
- Done
if you're going to have a verdict in the infobox you should also state the charges
- body doesn't list all the charges, will add that then do this
citation 9 has no date
- Done
this is very pedantic but citation 4 is the only one without an archive
- Done