Talk:Munnu Kasliwal

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Feedback

@MariaMamba11: Greetings! Your article is good shape and really off to a great start!

You need to merge in your references! They are all sitting at the bottom but they need to be included in the text.
You should include more detail than just the URLs. You can find more information at Help:Referencing for beginners.
Watch tone and try to make sure that you maintain an encyclopedic tone and a neutral point of view. Maintain detachment and try describe things in a formal and objective way.

I think you've totally established WP:NOTE so once you make a few changes to address the above, please go ahead and make the move and put the article in the "(Article)" namespace. This is good work! Good luck! —mako ๛ 00:38, 24 October 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Hello, checking in

Thank you for the feedback and Im just getting it now. I have been offline all weekend, I injured myself at work so I have been taking it easy all weekend. I havent moved my article in yet. When I tried to work on it I forgot to hit "Save Page" and lost some of my new info so I will get reconfigured and all in by this evening. Thanks again for getting back to me!MariaMamba11 (talk) 02:21, 26 October 2015 (UTC)[reply]

@MariaMamba11: I just made a pass through. The article is shaping up and the referencing is quite solid. The paragraph that begins with the sentence about Kasliwal being a seducer could probably be edited so it reads as a bit less enthusiastic and a bit more neutral. As it is, it sounds like a little like promotion of the subject. This is in good shape! —mako ๛ 18:48, 26 October 2015 (UTC)[reply]

A few comments

@MariaMamba11: I saw this article mentioned on Mako's talk page and decided to check it out.

I added two categories. You may be able to find more that would apply here.
Can you add an infobox?
The link for Munnu the Gem Palace takes me to a general information page. Can you link it more specifically to where this jeweler's collection from the Met is mentioned?
Can you find a link to the collection at the Met on the Met's pages, if it was ever mentioned there? Such a link would be quite a valuable reference.
A little copyediting would be helpful.
This article looks like a good start overall.

--Pine^✉ 19:01, 26 October 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Hello, thank you for the feedback and checking out my article

I can try to add an info box, im aware its a little bit difficult but I can try and do my best. I also have the link to the Met Gala collection, ill insert it. What exactly do you mean by copyediting? If it will improve my article, id be thrilled to know. Thank you. MariaMamba11 (talk) 04:14, 29 October 2015 (UTC)[reply]