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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 21:26, 9 September 2021 (UTC)
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- "their grip over" control? Bit more neutral tone.
- Revised. Al Ameer (talk) 16:32, 10 September 2021 (UTC)
- "in 1636. In 1657" repetitive.
- 1636 was an error actually, removed. Al Ameer (talk) 16:32, 10 September 2021 (UTC)
- "tax farmer" what's one of those?
- I could tell you it's not of the Ol' MacDonald variety. Should I explain this a bit in the lead or the term's first mention in the body?
- "of the Chouf who" if you're not saying Chouf region, shouldn't this just be "of Chouf who"?
- In the sources it is always introduced as "the Shuf" or "the Chouf". Similar to "the Galilee" or "the Rockys". Al Ameer (talk) 16:32, 10 September 2021 (UTC)
- "Grand Duke of Tuscany" is there a link for this?
- Thought that the linking of Grand Duchy of Tuscany would suffice, but linked the title Grand Duke of Tuscany anyway. Al Ameer (talk) 16:32, 10 September 2021 (UTC)
- "southern Beqaa Valley was" overlinked.
- Fixed. Al Ameer (talk) 16:32, 10 September 2021 (UTC)
- "a one year term' one-year.
- Fixed. Al Ameer (talk) 16:32, 10 September 2021 (UTC)
- "governor of Tripoli.[17]" tripoli overlnked.
- Fixed. Al Ameer (talk) 16:32, 10 September 2021 (UTC)
- "taxes in Keserwan, the" overlinked.
- Fixed. Al Ameer (talk) 16:32, 10 September 2021 (UTC)
- "of Safed, which" overlinked.
- Fixed. Al Ameer (talk) 16:32, 10 September 2021 (UTC)
- "and the Shia Muslim Hamade" overlinked.
- Fixed. Al Ameer (talk) 16:32, 10 September 2021 (UTC)
- "later succeeded Bashir" unreferenced.
- First biblio entry needs an en-dash in the year range.
- Fixed. Al Ameer (talk) 16:32, 10 September 2021 (UTC)
- As does Olsaretti.
- Fixed. Al Ameer (talk) 16:32, 10 September 2021 (UTC)
That's all I have. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 08:56, 10 September 2021 (UTC)
- Thanks The Rambling Man. Almost finished. Need to add that citation for Bashir's succession. Otherwise, just let me know about the tax farm explanation. Al Ameer (talk) 16:32, 10 September 2021 (UTC)
- I think tax farmer needs a footnote, referenced of course, to explain to people like me who haven't got a clue! The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 10:12, 12 September 2021 (UTC)