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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 21:26, 9 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]


Comments

  • "their grip over" control? Bit more neutral tone.
  • "in 1636. In 1657" repetitive.
  • "tax farmer" what's one of those?
  • I could tell you it's not of the Ol' MacDonald variety. Should I explain this a bit in the lead or the term's first mention in the body?
  • "of the Chouf who" if you're not saying Chouf region, shouldn't this just be "of Chouf who"?
  • "Grand Duke of Tuscany" is there a link for this?
  • "southern Beqaa Valley was" overlinked.
  • "a one year term' one-year.
  • "governor of Tripoli.[17]" tripoli overlnked.
  • "taxes in Keserwan, the" overlinked.
  • "of Safed, which" overlinked.
  • "and the Shia Muslim Hamade" overlinked.
  • "later succeeded Bashir" unreferenced.
  • First biblio entry needs an en-dash in the year range.
  • As does Olsaretti.

That's all I have. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 08:56, 10 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks The Rambling Man. Almost finished. Need to add that citation for Bashir's succession. Otherwise, just let me know about the tax farm explanation. Al Ameer (talk) 16:32, 10 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
I think tax farmer needs a footnote, referenced of course, to explain to people like me who haven't got a clue! The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 10:12, 12 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
@The Rambling Man: Done! Al Ameer (talk) 04:18, 13 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]