Talk:Mukkabaaz

GA Review

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Reviewer: Veera Narayana (talk · contribs) 19:19, 1 May 2019 (UTC)

• "Jointly produced by Aanand L. Rai under his label Colour Yellow Productions and Phantom Films, the film stars..." -- Why not Jointly produced by Aanand L. Rai's Colour Yellow Productions and Phantom Films, the film stars...?
• "Hussain learned non-verbal communication from a sign language expert for her role." -- Is it that important to be a part of the lead? I guess, we may mention more about the Themes, influences and filming in the lead.
• "He then goes to Varanasi and is trained by Sanjay Kumar." -- leaves for Varanasi might sound better. BTW who is Sanjay Kumar?
• "However, Mishra despises the marriage and threatens his brother." -- What is the brother's role here in the couple's marriage? Is he Sunaina's father or someone else?

The brother is Sunaina's uncle and a local strongman who doesn't really like his elder brother (Sunaina's father). Yashthepunisher (talk) 19:23, 2 May 2019 (UTC)

• He mentions: "I’ve seen lots of stories like this, which stayed with me over the years. I wrote this film because I wanted to play this character and I knew the only way to do that is by writing it myself." -- No issues with the quote, but using "mentions" might not be the right choice. Sounds quite un-encyclopedic.
• TBH, Scripting and Development sections would fit better in a single section. I don't see a particular need as to why we need two sections now.
• "was cast" is a phrase oft repeated in the Casting section. Please look at it.
• "Kashyap told him not to do "filmi training" but to become a hardcore boxer." -- to whom?
• "The film is set in the Bareilly district of Uttar Pradesh and is inspired by several true incidents" and "Mukkabaaz also deals with the issue of the caste system and cow vigilantism in India" -- You really believe this fits in the Filming section?
• Singh trained for a year to play the part with coach Anudeep Singh, a former boxer, who was coaching people for free and runs a garage. His story was used when researching the film. He was also trained by Harpreet Singh, who was a coach of the Indian boxing team. Singh did not disclose to his coaches that he was preparing for a film role. His trainers said that Singh was learning boxing at the age when boxers usually retire. -- This one too. If we refer to the Development part, we see the lines "To prepare for the role, Singh could find only mixed martial arts fighters in Mumbai, who were expensive. Kashyap connected him to boxer Vijender Singh, who put him in touch with coaches in Patiala." If I were you, these things would either lie together in the Development or Casting section.
• "Kashyap heard her song and asked her about its composer; she replied that she had composed it herself. Kashyap later signed her for the film. Kashyap later signed her for the film." -- We may simplify this to "Kashyap heard a song composed by Arora and approached her, later signing her for the film."
• "A 21-second-long audio teaser was released on 7 July 2017 with the voice of Ravi Kishan. It was followed by a poster launch on 7 December 2017, which showed Singh lying inside a boxing ring with blood on his face. The official trailer was released the same day." -- This might be against WP:FILMMARKETING.
• Rohit Vats of Hindustan Times isn't a "She".
• Outlook and Mint to be wikilinked.
• Cow vigilantism is already wikilinked above. No need to highlight it again in NDTV Review.
• Ref. 17 and 39 are the same! Why?

Let me know once the above comments are addressed. Then, i shall have another look and will decide. Regards, Veera Narayana 19:19, 1 May 2019 (UTC)

Veera Narayana All fixed. Yashthepunisher (talk) 19:23, 2 May 2019 (UTC)

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

1. Is it reasonably well written?

   A. Prose quality:

   B. MoS compliance:

2. Is it factually accurate and verifiable?

   A. References to sources:

   B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:

   C. No original research:

3. Is it broad in its coverage?

   A. Major aspects:

   B. Focused:

4. Is it neutral?

   Fair representation without bias:

5. Is it stable?

   No edit wars, etc:

6. Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?

   A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:

   B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:

7. Overall:

   Pass or Fail: Veera Narayana 07:02, 3 May 2019 (UTC)

Thank you for the review Veera Narayana. Yashthepunisher (talk) 08:29, 3 May 2019 (UTC)