Talk:Muchachos bañándose en la laguna de Maracaibo/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 17:34, 30 March 2020 (UTC)

Going to review this article. MWright96 (talk) 17:34, 30 March 2020 (UTC)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

Lead

• "it has not seen as much modern discussion as that film." - the latter

Content

• "on disc 3.[2]:66, 91-2." - the extra period is redundant
• "The first is a reconstructed shot of kids jumping into the lake," - children

Screening

• "Less than six months after the first Vitascope had been brought to Venezuela, Venezuelan film" - try not to have a similarly word to follow another
• "at exactly 7:00 pm[2]:9 with the screening of two films produced in the country" - a comma is missing between "p.m." and the number of the reference
• "were shown at the same time." - how about simultaneously instead?
• Please say briefly who Rodolfo Izaguirre is

Production and identity of director

• "For many years, sources suggested that it was either Trujillo, or Trujillo" - close repetition of the word "Trujillo"
• "Those who feel he could be the director rely on Trujillo's proximity to film" - try to reword this sentence with the mention of Trujillo's surname earlier
• "Alexis Fernández, film scholar and lecturer, and a biographer of Trujillo[16]" - a comma is missing after the word "Trujillo" and the reference number
• Please briefly state who Jesús Ángel Semprún Parra and Luis Guillermo Hernández are

Modern critical views

• "there were typically either government-focused films or tourism films" - close repetition of the word "films"
• "She proposes that being a frontrunner of the industry was cause for the government to take over the industry" - try to avoid repetition of the word "industry" in the same sentence

References

• References 3, 5, 12 and 14 are dead and will need to be archived
• Reference 17 is missing the publisher of the work

This is what was found during my reading of the article. On hold. MWright96 (talk) 11:03, 31 March 2020 (UTC)

@MWright96: I think I've addressed everything, let me know if there's anything else. Kingsif (talk) 16:16, 31 March 2020 (UTC)

@Kingsif: Promoting to GA class. MWright96 (talk) 17:59, 31 March 2020 (UTC)