Talk:Muadianvita Kazadi/GA1

GA Review

Passed. ~WikiOriginal-9~ (talk) 20:19, 30 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

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Nominator: BeanieFan11 (talk · contribs) 22:56, 29 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: WikiOriginal-9 (talk · contribs) 15:53, 30 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

Added cats.
"Zairian-born" I know the name Zaire doesn't exist anymore but change to "Zairian". That is what he is.
- Changed.
Do you know if he's an American citizen yet? If not, perhaps change lead to "American football".
- Not sure – I have the lead as "is a Zairian former American football linebacker".
"and current strength and conditioning coach" change "and current" to "who is currently the"
- Changed.
"three years, being a Butkus Award" Just make the Butkus Award its own sentence.
- Changed.
"1999, then joined the Kansas City Chiefs in 2001" Make this its own sentence and reword to "He then joined the Kansas City Chiefs in 2001 and was allocated to NFL Europe to play for the Barcelona Dragons"
- Changed.
Added the minor league stint arrow in the infobox.
Remove 1998 from Rams in infobox.
- Done.
"He concluded his career with the Buffalo Bills in 2002." Say he was released before the start of the season or something.
- Added.
The body says his ARK State stint was all sports so maybe remove football link from infobox.
- Changed.
Added many coaching cats
PFR has something else for his full name so which is right?
- Changed to match PFR.
What's the source for his nickname?
- Its mentioned in the coaching career section ("The very first day -- I don't even think we'd gotten back in school yet -- we get a text from Coach Kaz...") – do you think I'd need to add a source to the lead?
"first years in the United States" U.S. is abbreviated earlier so abbreviate here too.
- Done.
"400m relay and 1,600m" Wikilinks.
- Linked.
"which had offered a scholarship" "which" sounds kinda awkward? Is that right?
- Removed that part.
"purple belt" link?
- There's a link to Brazilian jiujitsu at Purple Belt, but I'm not sure if it was specifically that.
"second-team All-Independent" Since Tulsa had no conference, add that highlight to the infobox.
- Added.
"Kazadi returned to his job as a prison guard in the 1995 offseason. Entering the 1995 season" but two paragraphs earlier it says "In the offseason after the 1994 season". Isn't that the same timeframe??
- Meant to say 1996 offseason - moved around.
"senior year, 1996" just remove comma and put "in 1996"
- Changed.
"against Oklahoma State Cowboys" add the
- Added.
"and was named second-team all-division" What division? Is that the independent thing again or no?
- Clarified - they were part of the Western Athletic Conference by this time.
"of Montreal Alouettes" add the
- Added.
"Eastern Division final" wikilink CFL Eastern Division.
- Linked.
Remove 2000 from Alouettes in infobox.
- Removed.
Where's circa 2003 to 2004 from in infobox. Body doesn't say anything.
- I was basing it off of him being in the NFL in 2002 and him being with the Chiefs in 2005 – it would have had to been in between those years. A master's degree usually takes about two years to complete, right?
"He also became an assistant athletic director for the Bears" Shouldn't that be in the infobox or do we not know the timespan?
- The timespan is unclear.
"safety Ahmad Dixon noted" Capitilize safety
- Done.
"and was the Associate Athletics Director for Athletic Performance in his last five years" Is that the same Baylor "assistant athletic director" thing that was mentioned earlier?
- Sounds different – since the previous role was mentioned in 2009, whereas last five years would be 2012-16.
"In January 2018, he was hired by the SMU Mustangs as Assistant Athletic Director for Human Performance, as well as being named head strength and conditioning coach" Are both of those football roles or other sports too?
- All sports for assistant a.d., strength coach for football. Thoughts?
Is his TCU job just football or no? ~WikiOriginal-9~ (talk) 16:20, 30 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
- Sounds like just football based on the title itself ('Assistant Athletics Director for Football Human Performance').
Responded to everything @WikiOriginal-9: BeanieFan11 (talk) 19:48, 30 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Last points: 1. Add Baylor Associate Athletics Director for Athletic Performance to infobox. 2. Clarify that SMU strength coach is for football since that's what the source says ("while serving as the head strength and conditioning coach for the football program") ~WikiOriginal-9~ (talk) 20:03, 30 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
- @WikiOriginal-9: Added Baylor to infobox and clarified strength coach for football for SMU. Is that everything? Thanks, BeanieFan11 (talk) 20:17, 30 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  That's everything. Great work! ~WikiOriginal-9~ (talk) 20:18, 30 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

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