Talk:Moynihan Train Hall/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Lee Vilenski (talk · contribs) 15:23, 5 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Hello, I am planning on reviewing this article for GA Status, over the next couple of days. Thank you for nominating the article for GA status. I hope I will learn some new information, and that my feedback is helpful.

If nominators or editors could refrain from updating the particular section that I am updating until it is complete, I would appreciate it to remove a edit conflict. Please address concerns in the section that has been completed above (If I've raised concerns up to references, feel free to comment on things like the lede.)

I generally provide an overview of things I read through the article on a first glance. Then do a thorough sweep of the article after the feedback is addressed. After this, I will present the pass/failure. I may use strikethrough tags when concerns are met. Even if something is obvious why my concern is met, please leave a message as courtesy.

Best of luck! you can also use the {{done}} tag to state when something is addressed. Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)}

Please let me know after the review is done, if you were happy with the review! Obviously this is regarding the article's quality, however, I want to be happy and civil to all, so let me know if I have done a good job, regardless of the article's outcome.

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named for Daniel Patric - named after? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 19:40, 10 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
@Lee Vilenski, Done. 𝑷𝒂𝒛 𝒆 𝒄𝒐𝒏𝒄𝒐́𝒓𝒅𝒊𝒂 ^{What's up?} 10:34, 11 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
In addition + do we need to say this? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 19:40, 10 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
@Lee Vilenski, I don't think its a superfluous thing, because the sentence looks better with this expression (my opinion). 𝑷𝒂𝒛 𝒆 𝒄𝒐𝒏𝒄𝒐́𝒓𝒅𝒊𝒂 ^{What's up?} 10:36, 11 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
I've removed this, because the previous sentence should typically be "Moynihan Train Hall has..." That way, "In addition, it has..." would make sense. However, the previous sentence talks about the renovation, not the features of the complex itself. Epicgenius (talk) 18:56, 11 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
three works of art is quite vague. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 19:40, 10 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
@Lee Vilenski, I don't know if you realized but, the article explains the artworks right next this sentence. 𝑷𝒂𝒛 𝒆 𝒄𝒐𝒏𝒄𝒐́𝒓𝒅𝒊𝒂 ^{What's up?} 10:38, 11 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
I think Mr. Vilenski is talking about the fact that "works of art" is vague. I've clarified that one was a triptych, another was photographic panels, and the third was a sculptural group. Epicgenius (talk) 18:56, 11 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
having been + both of these words are superfluous. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 19:40, 10 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
@Lee Vilenski, Done. 𝑷𝒂𝒛 𝒆 𝒄𝒐𝒏𝒄𝒐́𝒓𝒅𝒊𝒂 ^{What's up?} 10:38, 11 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
which saw 650,000 daily riders before the COVID-19 pandemic in 2020. - The article made me think this was the riders in this part of the train hall, but it obviously wasn't open then. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 19:40, 10 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
@Lee Vilenski. I'm not a native english speaker, but it not seems ambiguous for me, look: ...The train hall will alleviate congestion in Penn Station, which saw 650,000 daily riders... Its just my opinion. 𝑷𝒂𝒛 𝒆 𝒄𝒐𝒏𝒄𝒐́𝒓𝒅𝒊𝒂 ^{What's up?} 10:44, 11 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
I have clarified this. Epicgenius (talk) 18:56, 11 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]

General

The construction section has the individual phases. I suggest even a small sentence that explains what the different phases are, or at least how many there are. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 19:45, 10 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
@Lee Vilenski, can I ask something? This small sentence must have references or not? Best wishes. 𝑷𝒂𝒛 𝒆 𝒄𝒐𝒏𝒄𝒐́𝒓𝒅𝒊𝒂 ^{What's up?} 10:49, 11 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Phase 2 consists of the new - check for tense. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 19:46, 10 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
@Lee Vilenski, in this case I have to replace the "the" with "a"? Sorry, I'm not a native speaker. 𝑷𝒂𝒛 𝒆 𝒄𝒐𝒏𝒄𝒐́𝒓𝒅𝒊𝒂 ^{What's up?} 10:52, 11 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Paz e concórdia, it depends on the context. You would say "Phase 2 consists of the new train hall in the fully renovated Farley Building" if you have previously mentioned the train hall (as the article does, in the "Description" section). Otherwise, you would say "Phase 2 consists of a new train hall). It is confusing even if you're a native speaker. Epicgenius (talk) 18:51, 11 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
@Epicgenius, thank you for helping me, its really hard to understand all these things, thanks for clarifying the others too. 𝑷𝒂𝒛 𝒆 𝒄𝒐𝒏𝒄𝒐́𝒓𝒅𝒊𝒂 ^{What's up?} 20:18, 11 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
I was more getting at it being "consisted", as presumably it's now over. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 12:03, 13 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Review meta comments

I'll begin the review as soon as I can! If you fancy returning the favour, I have a list of nominations for review at WP:GAN and WP:FAC, respectively. I'd be very grateful if you were to complete one of these if you get time. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 15:23, 5 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]

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