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Former good article nomineeMoviestar (Harpo song) was a Music good articles nominee, but did not meet the good article criteria at the time. There may be suggestions below for improving the article. Once these issues have been addressed, the article can be renominated. Editors may also seek a reassessment of the decision if they believe there was a mistake.
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DateProcessResult
July 21, 2022Good article nomineeNot listed

GA Review

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 07:16, 20 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]


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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()
3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()
Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

I will review this article today --K. Peake 07:16, 20 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox and lead

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  • Invoked a note next to "I Don't Know Why" saying it was the B-side in the rest of Europe, as the worldwide release is not backed up
  • Pipe Skärmarbrink to Skärmarbrink metro station in the infobox
  • The pop genre is not sourced in the body and only Schlager influences are mentioned
  • Mention in the first sentence that it was "for his seventh studio album of the same name (1976)"
  • The second sentence of the first para should be the backing vocals one instead
  • The lead is quite poorly ordered; for starters, the rejection sentence should be the fourth sentence of the first para, then the recording one and release afterwards
  • ""Moviestar" tells the story of an individual who believes to be an A-list actor" → "It tells the story of an individual who dreams of being an actor"
  • "It makes multiple references to" → "Multiple references are made to" but the pop culture part is not directly sourced anywhere in the body
  • "producer Bengt Palmers rejected it as he felt he could not properly produce the record." → "Bengt Palmers rejected it as he felt he could not properly undertake production."
  • Sveriges Television should not be italicised
  • Remove the previous connections part since this is only notable for the body, not the lead
  • Remove overly obvious wikilink on United Kingdom
  • Critical reception should come before commercial performance
  • "became a hit on" → "became a hit in"
  • Remove wikilink on Continental Europe
  • Remove wikilink on Netherlands
  • "during August of that year. It made it's way across" → "during August 1975. The song moved across"
  • Remove wikilink on Scandinavia
  • "The single was well-received" → ""Moviestar" was well-received"
  • Wikilink signature song

Background

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  • Remove wikilink on Stockholm, also the theatre is not sourced as being there
  • "There he met several people" → "There Harpo met several people"
  • The songs catching the attention of those friends is not sourced
  • "which would eventually attract the attention of" → "eventually attracting the attention of"
  • Pipe Stig "Stikkan" Andersson to Sting Anderson
  • Pipe pop to Pop music
  • Fix MOS:QWQ issues on the quote box
  • "Instead, he signed with" → "Instead, Harpo signed with"
  • Introduce Bengt Palmers as being a producer
  • "his single "Sayonara" managed" → "Harpo's single "Sayonara" managed"
  • "he saw virtually no" → "Harpo initially saw virtually no"
  • The story being amusing for Harpo is not sourced
  • "his record label to record the song." → "his record label to record it." but this is not sourced, unless my translator is faulty?
  • Sveriges Radio should not be italicised
  • "which Harpo would state" → "which Harpo would explain"

Composition and recording

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  • Img looks good!
  • Swap the lyrical and musical paras around
  • "the song follows an" → "the song follows the story of an" but none of this sentence is sourced by the ref invoked
  • Pipe third-person perspective to Gender neutrality in languages with gendered third-person pronouns
  • "reveals that this actor has" → "reveal the actor has"
  • Pipe television commercials to Television advertisement
  • Sveriges Radio should not be italicised
  • "this brought some dept" → "this brought some depth" but this quote is unsourced
  • "Musically, the song is rather upbeat with" → "Musically, "Moviestar" has an upbeat style with" but can't you sourced any genres?
  • "that come in after each" → "that come in after the"
  • Pipe choruses to Refrain
  • "The song features a" → "It features a"
  • "written by producer Bengt Palmers," → "written by Palmers,"
  • "to his producer Bengt Palmers, it was" → "to Palmers, it was"
  • "Since Harpo already hade" → "Since Harpo already had"
  • Remove wikilink on Stockholm
  • Remove wikilink on ABBA
  • Remove wikilink on Polar Music
  • "backing voice came Lena Ericsson who" → "backing voice came from Lena Ericsson, who"

Release and commercial performance

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  • "as English division of" → "as the English division of"
  • "through a smaller record label, DJM Records on" → "through smaller record label DJM Records on"
  • "It was released across Europe" → either change to the rest of Europe or Continental Europe, depending on where it was released
  • Pipe radio stations to Radio broadcasting
  • "by his own." → "on his own."
  • "In Sweden, France and UK" → "In Sweden, France and the United Kingdom" but where is the UK release sourced?
  • "his debut album Leo The Leopard the previous year." → "Harpo's debut album Leo The Leopard (1975)."
  • Pipe gold disc to Music recording certification on the img text
  • "the Netherlands on the Dutch Top 40; it entered" → "the Netherlands in the Dutch Top 40, entering"
  • "it would enter" → "the song would enter"
  • ""Moviestar" had significant appeal in" → ""Moviestar" experienced significant success in"
  • Remove wikilink on German speaking world
  • Remove wikilink on Germany
  • Remove wikilink on Austria
  • Remove wikilink on Switzerland
  • "weeks while it was at number-one for four weeks" → "weeks, while spending four weeks at number-one"
  • Shouldn't number-one have a dash always for consistency?
  • "a hit in Oceania, reaching the top-ten" → "a hit in Oceania, reaching the top-10" per MOS:NUM
  • Remove wikilink on Australia
  • Remove wikilink on New Zealand
  • [17] should only be invoked once in the sentence
  • Remove wikilink on Scandinavia
  • "while also reaching" → "while also peaking at" but this position is not sourced, also why is an additional citation used for position 3 in Denmark here?
  • Remove wikilink on Finland
  • Italicise Svensktoppen
  • Add a full-stop at the end of the above sentence rather than a semi-colon
  • "was blocked by DJM who" → "was blocked by DJM, who"
  • ""Movie Star" becoming a chart hit in the UK; it reached" → ""Movie Star" becoming a chart hit in the UK, reaching" to start the sentence, unless a source can be added to back up them relenting
  • The capitalization through the release is not sourced
  • "reached number two," → "reached number two on two respective weeks," or something similar, but the positions are not sourced by the URLs; maybe add archives?
  • Wikilink compilation albums

Critical Reception and legacy

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  • Retitle to Critical reception and legacy
  • No year from the 21st century, yet alone 2012 is mentioned here so remove the img per lack of relevance
  • "by Expressen, who write that" → "by the staff of Expressen, who write"
  • "production" by Bengt Palmers." → "production" by Palmers."
  • "by the backing comp" → "by the backing composition"
  • If there is a bass guitarist, should his instrument be mentioned in comp or is the role not really detailed enough?
  • wrote that "Moviestar certainly" → "write that "Moviestar certainly" and introduce this as being by staff too
  • "but compares the song" → "and compare the song"
  • "the single is described as" → "the staff describe the single as"
  • "They end the review" → "The staff end the review"
  • "with Sveriges Radio, he stated" → "with Sveriges Radio, he stated:"
  • "for Sveriges Television however, he stated" → "for Sveriges Television however, Harpo said"
  • Pipe royalties to Royalty payment
  • Around the start of the third para, you should mention the one million figure noted in the lead
  • Pipe "Shenandoah" to Oh Shenandoah and add the release year
  • "It is therefore cited" → "The song has therefore been cited"
  • "amongst Germans which has led Harpo to" → "amongst Germans, leading Harpo to"

Personnel

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  • Retitle to Credits and personnel
  • Use {{spaced ndash}} so there is the right space between credits and personnel

Charts

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Weekly charts

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Year-end charts

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  • The charts needn't be linked here when you have already done that in weekly

References

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  • Copyvio score looks amazing at 2.0%!!!!
  • Cite Sveriges Radio as publisher instead on ref 1
  • www.allas.seAllas.se on ref 2
  • What exactly makes ref 4 a reliable source?
  • Remove SVT Play from ref 6
  • Cite VG-lista 2022 as publisher instead on ref 9 and pipe to VG-lista
  • Fix MOS:QWQ issues with ref 10 and change www.ndr.de → Ndr.de, citing as publisher instead
  • Remove or replace ref 12 since citing lyrics themselves is definitely not reliable
  • Remove the author from ref 13 and change sverigesradio.se → Sveriges Radio, citing as publisher instead
  • For ref 13, cite the title and publisher first, followed by YouTube in the via parameter then the archive URLs
  • Cite Billboard Books as work/website instead on ref 17 with the wikilink per MOS:LINK2SECT
  • WP:OVERLINK of Albert Bonniers Förlag on ref 18
  • Ref 19 is a duplicate of ref 6
  • Remove wikilink on EMI for refs 23, 40, 41, 44 and 54; also remove any Harpo wikilinks
  • Remove hitparade.ch from ref 25
  • Cite GfK Entertainment charts instead on ref 27, with the wikilink and as publisher
  • Cite last name followed by first on ref 30 instead for consistency
  • Remove www.flavourofnz.co.nz from ref 31 and cite RIANZ as publisher instead, piping to Recorded Music NZ
  • WP:OVERLINK of Sveriges Radio on refs 37 and 70
  • Remove musikon.se from ref 39
  • Cite Sverigetopplistan as publisher instead on refs 42 and 43, which should cite archives or the correct URLs
  • Fix MOS:CAPS issues with ref 49 and cite Hallandsposten instead with the wikilink
  • Music and Media → Music & Media on ref 51 with the wikilink
  • Remove Norwegiancharts.com from ref 52 and change to VG-lista with no wikilink
  • WP:OVERLINK of Sverigetopplistan and remove Swedishcharts.com on ref 53
  • Refs 55 and 75 are duplicates of ref 30
  • WP:OVERLINK of Ö3 Austria Top 40 on ref 56
  • Ref 66 is a duplicate of ref 31
  • Ref 69 is a duplicate of ref 35
  • Ref 71 is a duplicate of ref 29
  • WP:OVERLINK of Dutch Top 40 on ref 73
  • WP:OVERLINK of Single Top 100 on ref 74 and remove Dutch Charts
  • Ref 77 is a duplicate of ref 37

Final comments and verdict

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