Talk:Mountlake Terrace, Washington/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Hurricanehink (talk · contribs) 15:47, 8 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Since I can't go anywhere now, might as well review something and feel like I've traveled a bit!

Should Washington be linked in the first sentence?
- Partially fixed by un-piping the county link. A separate link to the state would be overlinking.
"land was logged by 1900 and was later subdivided into 10 acres (4.0 ha) chicken ranches, which were sold to farmers." - grammatically, I think "acres" should be singular, unless I'm misreading it
- Fixed.
"Judge Richard A. Ballinger purchased Lake McAleer in 1901 and renamed it to Lake Ballinger for his father, later leaving the area to become Seattle mayor.[" - this is the first mention of this lake, so perhaps give it a bit more context?
- Added an earlier mention.
"It was abandoned after the war, despite plans to expand it for civilian aviation, and acquired by real estate developers Albert LaPierre and Jack Peterson in 1949.[" - I think this should be split in two sentences after "aviation"
- Not done, as it would create a weird sentence fragment.
"Geiser loaned $5 (equivalent to $38 in 2018 dollars)[10] to the city government to file an incorporation charter with the state government, which was issued on November 29 and delivered the following day.[" - I appreciate this random, but important detail in the city's history!
- It caught my eye and should make for a fine DYK hook.
"As a result, one shopping center took 20 months to reopen and another was closed permanently." - I suggest you say "the other" instead of "another", since the previous sentence made it clear that the arson affected the two centers
- Fixed.
"resulting in the closure of local schools and the post office" - all local schools?
- Not all, but being a multi-city district there was a reshuffle.
You mention "plans for two casinos", and the "Economy" section mentions one casino. When did it open? Is it significant enough to mention?
- The second one isn't significant enough; the first only appears because it has a relatively large number of employees.
You link Mountlake Terrace High School three times in the article, so double check for overlinking
- Removed one link, but the others are necessary and warranted by MOS:DL as being helpful to readers.
"The city council also appoints citizens to serve on three advisory boards: the Arts Advisory Commission, Civil Service Commission, Community Policing Advisory Board, Neighborhood Parks Improvement Subcommittee, Planning Commission, Recreation and Parks Advisory Commission, and Salary Commission." - that's more than three
- Fixed.
"A local weekly newspaper, named The Enterprise, published a dedicated Mountlake Terrace edition from 1958 to 2009 and ceased publication in 2012." - what happened from 2009 to 2012?
- Fixed. It was downsized to a single edition for all cities and then died out.

This is a really good article. I enjoyed the read, and, if you couldn't tell from my review, generally only found some nitpicks. Please let me know if you have any questions. Cheers - ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 15:47, 8 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

@Hurricanehink: Thanks for the review. Sounder Bruce 19:12, 8 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]