Talk:Mother (video game)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 18:36, 13 October 2014 (UTC)[reply]

I'll complete the review within a few days, if that's OK. ☠ Jaguar ☠ 18:36, 13 October 2014 (UTC)[reply]

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

Is it reasonably well written?
A. Prose is "clear and concise", without copyvios, or spelling and grammar errors:

B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:
Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
A. Has an appropriate reference section:

B. Citation to reliable sources where necessary:

C. No original research:
Is it broad in its coverage?
A. Major aspects:

B. Focused:
Is it neutral?
Fair representation without bias:
Is it stable?
No edit wars, etc:
Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:

B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
Overall:
Pass or Fail:

Initial comments

I'll have to focus on copyediting issues in this review.

Lead

"but is set in a modern United States" - unless I'm mistaken the first Mother game is set in 1980 so would we agree that thirty four years ago is still considered 'modern' or contemporary?
"and circulated on the Internet as EarthBound Zero" - just curious, there was a discussion debating on the capitalisation of 'Internet' in some Wikipedia articles
The lead summarises the article well so this meets the criteria

Gameplay

"The game's protagonist, Ninten, is about 10 years old" - hey what happened to player-character!?
"and ventures outside to find a crazy world with hostile everyday objects and other odd events" - not very encyclopaedic, what about a formal synonym such as strange or berserk?

Development

When did development start?
"a North American release as Earth Bound" - just to be clear is this referring to the first Mother game or the second one?
"recorded in Tokyo, London, and Bath" - this is the correct city to be sure?

Reception and legacy

"Mother sold 150,000 copies" - in Japan only?
Although not a requirement for GA, I notice that there is no reception box and very few actual scores given from critics

References

The tool server is currently down so I had to check the references manually. They all seem to be working properly and I couldn't find any that seemed unreliable (not for this topic). The citations are also in their correct places so this meets the GA criteria.

On hold

This is another well written article and should have no problem passing the GAN. This will also be my (second) last review for some time and before closing this GAN I just wanted to make sure that those issues were clarified. The only problems I found with this article were a few minor copyediting issues (which would more than likely improve readability) and once they have been addressed I'm sure that this article will gain its well deserved GA status. ☠ Jaguar ☠ 18:46, 16 October 2014 (UTC)[reply]

@Jaguar, done—take a look? Modern/contemporary should be fine, since that's how the recent sources put it. But I changed it anyway to late 20th century. Also I capitalize Internet as a proper noun. Re: protagonist—took your advice on this one. (Ninten is also described as a protagonist more often, and he carries out the plot, so it fits.) I don't have a date for when development started. The 150k copies are assumed to be in Japan since it didn't have a wider release. Thanks for the review and best wishes on your wikibreak! czar ♔ 21:12, 16 October 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Close - promoted

Thanks for clearing those issues up, Czar, this article now meets the GA criteria. It is very broad, well written and long story short it is a strong GA. I might have to try this game on a emulator soon. I will cue the wikibreak, see you soon! ☠ Jaguar ☠ 16:03, 17 October 2014 (UTC)[reply]