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Former good articleMoses Bensinger was one of the Sports and recreation good articles, but it has been removed from the list. There are suggestions below for improving the article to meet the good article criteria. Once these issues have been addressed, the article can be renominated. Editors may also seek a reassessment of the decision if they believe there was a mistake.
Article milestones
DateProcessResult
March 11, 2021Good article nomineeListed
February 26, 2023Good article reassessmentDelisted
Did You Know
A fact from this article appeared on Wikipedia's Main Page in the "Did you know?" column on November 16, 2016.
The text of the entry was: Did you know ... that Moses Bensinger helped organize the American Bowling Congress, which standardized the rules of modern ten-pin bowling?
Current status: Delisted good article


Picture

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Picture of Moses Bensinger published 1904. This would solve the DYK problem if were uploaded to Commons and added to the article. 7&6=thirteen () 15:06, 18 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Mid life section

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GA Review

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This review is transcluded from Talk:Moses Bensinger/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 19:50, 7 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]


Comments

  • The lead is just a little brief for me, I usually aim for something from each level 2 heading in there (a good sanity check to see if new sections are needed too!)


  • "Brunswick-Balke-Collender Company" can't this be linked?


  • Early life section, latter four sentences are very short and disrupt readability, can you merge them, perhaps in pairs, to give a better reading experience?


  • I think it's fair to linked billiard and pool table in the main body.


  • Any reason Chicago isn't linked in the infobox?


  • "a couple of others " feels too informal in tone for an encyclopedic article.


  • "This competitive company," why "competitive?


  • "new merged company formed was incorporated " I'm confused by this wording.


  • A lot of the Mid life section talks about company names/mergers/incorporations etc, and not much about Bensinger.


  • "into bowling manufacturing" what does that mean? Bowling balls or equipment or what?


  • " played mostly by Germans in dimly lit Chicago saloons " sounds anecdotal, do you really mean that the sport lacked any kind of competitive organisation?
  •  Done Correct. Jones (page 66) = In the 1890s Moses Bensinger, Brunswick president saw great potential in the then-disorganized sport of bowling,
Cayton (page 881) = Bowling was a regional sport played in dimly lit German saloons until the 1890s when it separated from taverns.


  • "Bensinger helped coordinate and " something missing here it feels.


  • And you link bowling on the second mention here, unless that "german" bowling wasn't ten pin...


  • "He started then to make bowling balls and pins for new bowling alleys." wasn't this what happened in 1888 in the previous paragraph?


  • "Bensinger, Brunswick's German-Jewish son-in-law," eh?? Dropped that in before saying he got married to Brunswick's daughter? Seems odd ordering.


  • Don't think A.B.C. needs those full stops.


  • "daughter of John M. Brunswick..." shouldn't JMB be mentioned and linked prior to this?


  • Oh, what happened to the jewelry business?


  • Seems odd to have the billiard table and clubs/associations sections after his death section...


  • "that had his billiard" that used his.


  • Ref 3 has an odd formatting thing going on.


  • A-K should be A–K.


  • ISBNs should be consistently formatted.


  • Rapoport has a "." after the ref.


  • Close off the small text after the bibliography so it doesn't impact the External links section.


  • "American billiards" ext link could use a better description.


That's it on a quick pass, on hold. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 15:28, 8 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

 Working Thanks for review. I'll start on the issues.--Doug Coldwell (talk) 15:33, 8 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • Ref 34 has a weird period thing going on.
  • Ref 49 needs The Republic to be disambiguated.

The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 13:36, 11 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Copyright contributor investigation and Good article reassessment

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This article is part of Wikipedia:Contributor copyright investigations/20210315 and the Good article (GA) drive to reassess and potentially delist over 200 GAs that might contain copyright and other problems. An AN discussion closed with consensus to delist this group of articles en masse, unless a reviewer opens an independent review and can vouch for/verify content of all sources. Please review Wikipedia:Good article reassessment/February 2023 for further information about the GA status of this article, the timeline and process for delisting, and suggestions for improvements. Questions or comments can be made at the project talk page. MediaWiki message delivery (talk) 09:36, 9 February 2023 (UTC)[reply]