Talk:Mosaics of Delos/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Iazyges (talk · contribs) 04:29, 24 July 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Will start shortly. Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 04:30, 24 July 2017 (UTC)[reply]

@Iazyges: I look forward to it! All the best, --Pericles of Athens^Talk 05:47, 24 July 2017 (UTC)[reply]

@PericlesofAthens: I've finished looking over the article. I've passed the GAN, but have a couple of prose suggestions for you to look over. Another great article! -- Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 07:04, 25 July 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Criteria

GA Criteria

GA Criteria:

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1.a Y

1.b Y
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2.a Y

2.b Y

2.c Y

2.d Y
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3.a Y

3.b Y
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4.a Y
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5.a Y
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6.a Y

6.b Y

No DAB links Y
No Dead links Y
Images appropriately licensed Y

Prose Suggestions

Lede

"Most of the surviving mosaic artworks from Delos, Greece, an Aegean island in the Cyclades," The page for the Cyclades mentions that the island group is considered to be clustered around Delos itself; I'm not totally sure if it's worth adding, but you might want to consider a short piece on it.
"date to the last half of the 2nd century BC and early 1st century BC, during the Hellenistic period and beginnings of Roman Greece." perhaps "and the begining of the Roman Greek period." would fit better.

Body

Dating

"Of the 354 mosaics of Delos studied by French archaeologist Philippe Bruneau," is it known how many total mosaics are on Delos? It would seem a worthy addition, to give an idea of the sample size he was working with.
The caption for the left image within the Dating section links to Ambrosia, but the link itself goes to the food; the Hyade Ambrosia, which is the actual subject, is mentioned in a DAB page, but doesn't have its own page. You may wish to redlink it, perhaps [[Ambrosia (Hyade)|Ambrosia]].

Characteristics

"found in fifty-five homes and usually reserved for the ground floor." you may wish to restructure this slightly, perhaps "found in fifty-five homes, usually on the ground floor." or "found in fifty-five homes, and which usually reserved for the ground floor."
"Rachel Hachlili writes that the single wave pattern, a common motif in Hellenistic art, is the most predominant type of border design for mosaics at Delos and appear in mosaics of Arsameia (albeit arranged in the opposite direction)." You may wish to slightly introduce Rachel Hachlili, perhaps "Rachel Hachlili, the classical Archaeologist," or "Professor Rachel Hachlili".
"Aside from a sign of the Punic-Phoenician goddess Tanit," what does "a sign" mean here? Is it a symbol associated with her? If not, perhaps "a depiction" would work better.

Pericles' reply

@Iazyges: hi again! Thanks for reviewing the article. I'm not sure if the Cyclades need much more of an explanation, but I've reworded the other parts of the article where you suggested changes. That includes the sentences about Roman Greece, the fifty-five homes with white chip pavement, the profession of Rachel Hachlili, and the symbol of Tanit. I also made a new pipe link for Ambrosia. As for the 354 mosaics being studied by Bruneau: from what I understand after reading multiple texts, there are only 354 mosaics that have truly survived; they didn't leave any mosaics out to the equation! I have amended the text to reflect that. Regards, --Pericles of Athens^Talk 07:26, 25 July 2017 (UTC)[reply]

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