Talk:Moritz Wagner (basketball)/GA1

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 13:12, 10 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

Wikilink Regionalliga to List of Regionalligen#Basketball
- O.K.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 20:54, 10 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]
"scoring six points in 6:15 minutes of play " - 6 minutes and 15 seconds
- Thx.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 20:56, 10 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]
"However, Wagner mostly saw action on the club’s second team and on the under-19 Bundesliga squad that season." - this sentence is uncited and needs a reliable source to verify it
- Removed.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 21:08, 10 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]

"The hysteria of March Madness and college basketball got him hooked." - this should be slightly rewritten as "hooked" is unencyclopedic
- Fixed.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 21:10, 10 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]
"after watching video of Wagner," - a video
- O.K.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 21:14, 10 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]
"Beilein called former Alba Berlin player Johannes Herber, who had played under Beilein for four years at West Virginia University." - perhaps have Herber's playing position instead of player to avoid reptition of similarly spelt words
- edited another way.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 22:30, 10 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]
West Virginia University should have its acroynms in parentheses on the first time it is mentioned
- Thx.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 22:31, 10 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]
"in which he tried to sell them on the merits of U.S. college basketball over a European professional contract." - in which he tried to convince them the advantages of American college basketball over a European professional contract.
- O.K.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 22:36, 10 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]

"After blocking 2 shots all season, Wagner posted 4 blocks and had a season-high 8 rebounds" - the numbers in this text need to be spelt out
- O.K.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 22:43, 10 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]

The second paragraph is a little long. Consider splitting it into two after the mention of Wagner becoming an Academic All-Big Ten honoree.
- Split into three.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 00:56, 11 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]
"Wagner's 21 points and 10 rebounds complemented Charles Matthews 17 points and 12 assists" - Matthews'
- Fixed.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 01:02, 11 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]
"Michigan defeat Texas 59–52 on December 12 but Wagner injured his ankle with 7:36 remaining." - Michigan defeated Texas 59–52 on December 12 but Wagner injured his ankle with 7 minutes and 32 seconds remaining.
- O.K.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 01:05, 11 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]
"On January 13, 2018 Wagner scored" - a comma is needed between "2018" and "Wagner"
- Done.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 01:06, 11 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]
"including 3/4 from three-point range" - a three-point range
- Apparently there was a syntax issue causing confusion. I have changed 3/4 to 3-for-4 and similar elsewhere.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 01:14, 11 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Link East Lansing to East Lansing, Michigan
- O.K.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 01:22, 11 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Wikilink Most Valuable Player, Coaches Poll and AP Poll
- linked.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 01:25, 11 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Be consistent in what date format you use throughout the referencing
- Reformatted.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 01:40, 11 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]
References 10, 33, 48 are missing the author and publication date
- Dated.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 01:47, 11 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]
- Author for 10 and 33.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 01:51, 11 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]
References 36, 37 does not have the date it was published
- Dated.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 01:55, 11 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]
References 40, 42, 44, 46, 51, 54 do not have the author of their respective articles

Will put this review on hold for the time being. MWright96 (talk) 18:20, 10 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]