Talk:Morgan horse/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Casliber (talk · contribs) 10:30, 11 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Ok, having a look now - will jot queries below. Casliber (talk · contribs) 10:30, 11 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

I find the first sentence a little wooden. If I were aiming for FAC, I might try something like.."Tracing back from the 1790s horse Figure, The Morgan is one of the earliest horse breeds developed in the United States." or something like this (obviously that needs rejigging of the second sentence too...).

I'll fiddle with it a wee bit; my usual approach is to fix the body of the article before redoing the lead; so once we have everything else tweaked, let us know if we need more work on the lead. -- MTBW

~~During the early days of their history, the Morgan was used extensively for harness racing, as well as for pulling coaches, as they were known for their speed and endurance in harness.~~ ~~- align the singular/plural...~~

Tweaked. Better now? --MTBW

~~Daniel C. Lindley, a native of Middlebury, Vermont, compiled and published a book of Morgan breeding stallions published in 1857~~ ~~- err, probably don't need two "published" in there....~~

Tweaked. Better now? --MTBW

...~~as well as an "open competition" program run by the AMHA~~ ~~.... - why the quote marks?~~

"open competition" has a lot of different meanings in the horse world, so we are indicating it's a term of art when used in this sense by the AMHA. --- MTBW

ok Casliber (talk · contribs) 19:55, 15 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

gentleness - "gentle nature" methinks. bit too ambitious...

Tweaked. Better now? --MTBW

Otherwise looking good....Casliber (talk · contribs) 10:46, 11 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

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5. Reasonably stable?

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6. Illustrated by images, when possible and appropriate?:

Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:

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- that first sentence I'm still not hugely in love with, but it's not enough to stop GA status. Looks fine otherwise. Casliber (talk · contribs) 19:57, 15 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Awesome, thanks Cas! Dana boomer (talk) 21:07, 15 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Yes, thanks Cas. I hear you about the lede, I suspect we'll have to pep it up a lot before trying for FA, but that might be awhile, so if you want to take of your reviewer hat and play with it a bit yourself, we would be glad to have you stay around! Montanabw^(talk) 22:14, 15 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]